What a splashing first line that diffuses into a wonderfully crafted poem! Love the word choice.

Whoa, this is really good. You are a great poet, you have a sort of writing that's very unique, I really love it!

hahass. sorry havent reviewed for so long. like the comparison between the first and last stanzas. ohoh and the grandpa sun part. hahass. uhh. and the part that sounds like the milo ad.

yeah. why does everyone give such cheem reviews anyway? makes me feel small and insignificant. hahass. very nice and uh. flow-ey?

oh lovely. enjoyed the not-symmetry & perfect word-use; the imagery was stunning & ohso vivid.

"sunloved water"- brilliant.

-lin

all i can say is wow. and that i love your style.

(hey look it rhymes)never thought i'd be a poetwriting fancy riddlesjust stories weavedentangled and enmeshed.

loved it loved it and still do. i jive to your poemgroove and feel your geniusvibes. descriptive impeccability. -kismet.