|Reviews for The Dance|
| matapokker chapter 1 . 1/22/2005
"He was quite a bit taller than I, but we didn’t care" i like how you made the dance so free and 'who cares? it doesn't matter' sort of thing. but even though you wrote in the summary that it's a dream, i was rather surprised (pleasantly!)and i absolutely love 'dance upon the moonlight', it sounds so romantic. but when you have long and short lines, it tends to be a little..i don't know, weird? maybe you should divide this into stanzas, but i'm not sure that's a good idea because this format makes it emote uncontrollable-ness! yup.
| Ajna chapter 1 . 1/20/2005
Beautiful... romantic... just what I needed to read! Very good work!
"He was quite a bit taller than I, but we didn’t care." - I love how you somehow tore the seriousness of this without damaging the poem with this line. Keep writing!
| Minus the Bear chapter 1 . 1/20/2005
Very sweet poem. I was kind of, actually, shocked when it was a mere dream. Pretty good timing.