|Reviews for A Shattered World|
| Ahemait chapter 1 . 1/25/2005
okay that was...nice. i mean, it was completely random to put on here, but the point you're making comes through nicely. but you have at least two grammar mistakes you HAVE to fix: ach time I tried to talk to her, she would snapped at me saying she was very the snap. and also this:So that hurted me, so I wrote a note to her, so she could read it later. fix the hurt in that as well.