Reviews for Once Innocent Lips
Immortal Nyght chapter 1 . 3/7/2006
This is good, but not great. It has powerful diction and strong imagery, but the formatting seems to hinder it and thr rhyming sequence also brings it down a tad given its inconsistency. It catches me, and sticks with me, but really doesn't scream "wow".
Clap Clap Raise Your Hands chapter 1 . 6/1/2005
wow! i love this so so much! you told me to read this AGES ago and im so sorry now that i didnt! this is so amazing! i love this line "You just walked off checking out who was hot." -it just shows how little they care and i can really relate to this,as well as the rest of the poem. the end is so beautiful but at the same time so so sad, but the ending... wow! you know that makes the poem! the ending it THE BEST! much love x weasel within x
PyroChica chapter 1 . 2/28/2005
WOW...Very sad and depressing. Losing someone you cared about. And that person didn't even care.

SO HEARTLESS!

Very good though, GREAT JOB!

PyroChica*
Out-Of-Reality chapter 1 . 2/11/2005
O! the tombstones ending was really amazing. You have a very creative mind and a lot to express. You did it very very well!
addie pray chapter 1 . 2/8/2005
Well written poem...I can relate, with the whole guys are shit thing, except my poem on it wasn't so...poetic and controlled. Good job!
xHannahx chapter 1 . 1/28/2005
he hurt you bad didnt he? this shows a lot of emotion in a pretty controlled way. i like it.

Han.
Vici chapter 1 . 1/28/2005
I absolutly loved this one, it is great! It is one of my Favorites. Keep up the good work.
ChloBug chapter 1 . 1/28/2005
i like it. your venting, but it wasnt just this raw rage. its like you turned your rage into something, beutiful.
Moon-Chaser chapter 1 . 1/28/2005
I love the ending, and how in some way you seemed to knwo that he wasn't worth your time!

Keep it up.
Burnt Innocence chapter 1 . 1/27/2005
Now that;s what I'm talking about. I really enjoyed the last line,hehe. It was a very nice poem, can't wait to read more! :)
putz-6 chapter 1 . 1/27/2005
i like this poem it's good i really like the end _
Keith Andrew chapter 1 . 1/27/2005
Thtas very good alex, youre really coming on in terms of refinement and style. i like it alot, hope its not about me lol-Keith Andrew i dont think it is i left on a bus lol
dustytiger chapter 1 . 1/27/2005
great piece! the emotion is great, and i'm sure so many could relate to this, it's well worded though the rhyme scheme does seem forced it still works