|Reviews for Startup|
| HitchSlap chapter 1 . 1/22/2006
You've definitely got the style down, and you do well with dialogue, which is a major downfall for many people at Fanfiction. There's also a level of higher intelligence in your writing that I truly appreciate. You know what you're saying.
I'm just having some difficulties following along with what's happening. A lot of jumping around.