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![]() ![]() ![]() hi jojobear i really like your story . are you goin to update it soon? pls do. thank! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great start. I like the different points of view. Unlike some authors, the changes in POV sound very natural and you've captured the language of those times very well. I hope you update soon. Until next time! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love the makings of this story. i hope you do continue to write more... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm so glad you updated! When I read your story I feel as though I'm reading the work of a true, published author- it's wonderful! And I like how you switch the point-of-view every chapter so that we can see things from the eyes of all the different characteres. I really like Jacob so far and I wish Abby would end up with him, but I suppose I'll have to hear more of his younger brother Alexander before deciding who I think she's best with. Update again soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh! I like this very much. You have a wonderful writing style and your vocabulary is especially varied and suited to this time period. It is such a refreshing change to read a maturely-written story here. From these few chapters, I'm already excited about what is going to happen to these characters. Just a little note about grammar when writing dialogue. I noticed that you often capitalise where it's not needed and make a fragmented sentence. For example, "... any of Darla’s tricks.” He muttered." should read "... any of Darla's tricks," he muttered." Although Benjamin's statement is a complete sentence, the entire sentence includes the "he said", which is not a separate thought. Do you understand what I mean? I very much like Nicholas's character and how he's suddenly protective of Abby ... what is she going to think about being set up? Really nice so far, and I'll definitely be checking back to see how this progresses. Good job! ~Grace~ |
![]() ![]() wow! really good! update again soon! |
![]() ![]() So far, this is a very good story. Actually seems like a published novel. Most of the others seem childish, I enjoyed this. Keep writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, great story. As far as I know, you have a lot of the historical details correct. You really know your stuff! Abby is a fun character. I hope most of the story is told in her POV. |
![]() ![]() wow, great story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm interested in how Nicholas's character develops. The chapter was kind of short but nonetheless GOOD JOB. ~ Whispering Winds ~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like what you've got here so far, so keep up the good work and please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() After reading chapter 2 I love Abby even more. My favorite part was when she was getting off the ship and she waved hello to people she didn't know because she liked to act like they'd come to see her. lol. I can't wait to read more! Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've only read the first chapter so far, but I'm already very impressed. The only mistake I saw was when Abby was called Rory once. But other then that, I don't believe there were any other mistakes. I love Abby already and I can't wait to read more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Simply wonderful. |