Reviews for The Broken Road
Alanisaur chapter 6 . 2/25/2012
Val chapter 18 . 2/25/2012
Ok, I really hope Prada and Prejudice is better than this, because I don't know how you got published otherwise. The writing itself was fine, but you very frequently misused words, put commas where they weren't needed, and overall messed up. The amount of plot holes in this story is incredible, the characters are two Q/Does_robin_and_starfire_have_a_baby and inconsistent, and the language is far too modern for the time period. I am not an expert, but this definitely needs work if you want to produce it.
Val chapter 8 . 2/25/2012
I'm really enjoying this so far, but what's with all the modern language? I'm pretty sure they didn't use "ok", "one night stand", or "dad" in this time period.
Single White Rose chapter 26 . 2/24/2012
I read Prada and Prejudice and I thought it was terrific! Congratulations with all of your publishing success, I'm very happy/proud of you!
InkWitch chapter 8 . 1/19/2012
From the insinuations, I'm guessing that the uncle tried to take advantage of her as well. The thing that is like HORRIBLY FLAWED is that: How can Lillian trust and flirt Logan already, after such a short time of knowing him? And how could she do so RIGHT after she'd been molested by a man? That's not normal, and for a girl as reserved as Lillian, even less so.

You should rethink that.
Jenny-A chapter 24 . 12/19/2011
Wow, Congrat on your book deal. I think I've seen it around but I will defiantly check it out, nice to see someone on fiction press find success.
Jenny-A chapter 16 . 12/19/2011
I hate Rebbecca for some reason. This is wonderfully crafted!
Jenny-A chapter 9 . 12/19/2011
This is a great Novel! Good characters nice story line.
Lillypilly chapter 4 . 11/7/2011
I wonder about this Brant guy. In the early chapters he seemed nice enough but I don't trust him. The only good it's doing is getting Logan jealous which was quite funny. Maybe he'll be forced to act sooner in trying to get Lillian's attention.
Evenstar1389 chapter 23 . 9/3/2011
I like this story! It was an enjoyable read, full of the ups and downs of the misunderstandings in a romance story, but safe in the knowledge that it will be a happy ending :D
UneFille chapter 4 . 7/28/2011
just found this story and it perfectly fits my taste :)
natalie95 chapter 23 . 7/14/2011
wow! i wanted to review for every single chapter but i wanted to finish the story first, and it was fantastic! i finished the hall thing in one day because i couldn't bear to put my laptop down and not finish it, it was great and a very sweet story :)
its-like-i-sed chapter 23 . 6/18/2011
OMG this was sooooooo awesomely amazing. i loved every bit of it and it was sooo cute :) thanks for writing it xxxx
larafrancesca chapter 23 . 5/23/2011
Beautiful and very well writen, Lara x
Unagibento chapter 25 . 4/13/2011
I was going to review every chapter separately but I felt that it would be a bit repetitive seeing as how I absolutely loved this story and would have just kept repeating that over and over.

When I know I am going to love a story is when I can feel the emotions the characters are experiencing. With this story, I was so in tune with what Lilly was feeling. I would frown and smile and feel my heart break a little bit with her. I love that you made her as strong and proud a character as she is. One of my teachers in high school was actually blind and I couldnt help but admire him for taking his life as head on as he did. Lilly's ability to get through her life as she did independently and show no sign of feeling like she had a disability made me think about how it must have been for my teacher. Teenagers can be cruel sometimes, but he wasnt deterred by that.

I also liked Logan as well. His hurt and jealousy were not over done or irrational. I love stories that make me feel like I'm with the characters experiencing everything and your story kept me reading non-stop!

Also, I appreciate you not rushing everything. I felt the story flowed well and their actions and emotions weren't overdone or too little.

Thank you for creating such a wonderful read! It was much needed during my time of stress. :]

P.S. I actually saw Prada and Prejudice while I was browsing the bookstore! I think I'm going to have to go back and get it! ;]
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