Reviews for A Viper's Poison
Dirty White Belt chapter 15 . 11/7/2007
Oh my god! I just read your story over a course of a few days, and it was amazing! Everyday after school i would steal the computer from my little brother so i could read this. Keep up your great writing!
Drops of Jewpiter chapter 1 . 4/18/2006
woo, great first chpt. i can't wait to read the rest of this!

xbiancax chapter 1 . 9/14/2005
I like this story! So good! I loved the action that came along with it! I'm looking forward for the sequel!

free-to-dream15 chapter 15 . 8/28/2005
Aw..Your story was really good *adds to favorites* It took me the whole weekend to finish it, but I am glad I did. I was so sad when Darren "died" because he was my favorite! This really was a great story filled with mystery, romance, and action. I hope you make a sequel! Keep up the great work!
stupidsarah chapter 15 . 7/4/2005
Great ending. My last review... didn't show up haha! I had a billion questions, which were all answered in chapter 14. Amazing ). Keep writing! I need to hear more about "sarah" hehe xP. Until your next story!
BetweenLife chapter 15 . 7/4/2005
i like this story...good work
ice flyer chapter 15 . 7/2/2005
cute ending! this was a pretty cool story. i was a tiny bit confused at all the names and nicknames - there were a LOT at one point - but..i guess it's just me. i'll check for a sequel someday! good job! :)
DeadlySilent chapter 14 . 7/2/2005
The END! WHAT! Though I am very happy that you didn't kill Darren...I was about to hurt you! I really was...alright anyways. Your ending seemed i bit rushed but it was good. Very nice job.
booder chapter 14 . 6/30/2005
Yay! I'm so happy Darren didn't die. I knew he couldn't and I knew they'd use the bracelets lol. I don't know what else to say other than wonderful story and great characters...I absolutely loved it!:D
stupidsarah chapter 13 . 6/16/2005
Great story! It's so descriptive, and the characters do have a form of significant personality. Lovely! However (
stupidsarah chapter 5 . 6/15/2005
Beautiful so far! Dammit I have to go to bed in order to get up tomorrow... not a morning person. I noticed your story because of the name of the main char *points at own name* D! lovely! going to read more tomorrow probably hehe! Keep it up!
CynicInLove chapter 7 . 6/11/2005
first, before i fully start the review, im going to warn you that some of the things that i might say may be harsh,but it's criticism that will help if i could soften the words then i would but i really cant. firt of all,during her flashbacks and such, u were doing a narrative from a 10 year old sarah pov, but it still sounded like the 20 year old or whatever her age is sarah. yes, you explained briefly how sarah was a genius and everything, but i think even 10 year old geniuses don't talk like that. also, chapter 7 has got me completely frustrated beyond reason because she's been trained to hold in her emotions concerning ANYTHING since she was TEN YEARS OLD. she could not have possibly fallen in love THAT fast, yes i know there are few and far between scenarios of love at first sight, but even THIS is too soon. i mean, what? they've known each other for the remainder of TWO days? it might be superficial love but certainly not that much that sarah could forget her job over. im just extrememly confused.

i have absolutely NOTHING against the WAY you write (except when ur going between time periods), it's just the CONTENT of ur writing and if it makes sense and is it realistic? that's what bothers me i guess. some parts just dont add up and it's way out of reasoning how that could have possibly happened.

i really do hope that you'll take what im saying into consideration, im not forcing you, but i hope u will and just go over the story. keep on writing.-Dom
DeadlySilent chapter 13 . 6/11/2005
Karuli chapter 2 . 6/10/2005
interesting story. hope you update soon if it's not finished. i'm not exactly sure since i'm way back here. lol
DeadlySilent chapter 10 . 6/8/2005
Its getting so good!
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