|Reviews for TwoToned Facade|
| Pheobe Meryll chapter 1 . 5/5/2006
All the images you call to mind in this poem are really intense and real..."black darkness...thrown around me like a thick blanket, tossed over me to smother the angry flames of a fire,/that burns inside of me"...contrasting with the oranges and reds of the third line. I really like that contrast. I'd only suggest backing off on the punctuation - too much can drag down a good bit of poetry. overall wonderful.
| krystal-jasna chapter 1 . 2/25/2005
hey, it's me jasna shah...but now i'm not using jasna shah as my pen name but krystal-jasna..
anyway, i like the way u contrast what people think of u and ur true self. and i loved these parts .. "Hues of brilliant lemon yellows, tangerine oranges, fire engine reds,All thrown together in a haphazard way," and "Strawberries, blueberries, whipped cream color,From pie from a picnic, from the same day," it's really pretty in a way.
hope to see more great works..jasna