Reviews for The Gray Horse of the South
E. C. Doyal chapter 1 . 3/4/2005
Wonderful story! I thoroughly enjoyed how you brought a Southern setting and characters to life. Only two things I noticed and will make suggestions about:1. Annabelle says "Traveller" has two L's for a reason, but she never says why. I'm curious why, I'm very interested in Southern history but that's a bit of trivia I don't know. 2. You use the passive tense (i.e. "was" and "were") a lot, especially at the beginning of the story. I think it would be more effective, especially in the modern bit, to make it active. For instance, you could say "Maggie, on vacation from Ohio..." Like I said these are just suggestions. I really enjoyed your story. Good job! _