Reviews for Phoenix
Rusty-X-Nail chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
That was good.
Xalga chapter 1 . 6/3/2008
I'm not sure if you ment Ever or every, either way works for poetry though. The last line, the . and ,. Just watch out for those. I mean I make mistakes, a good number, but it's always good to try and catch 'em when it's a short piece like this. You make a good use of the space you have, the imagery is simple and open. Keep it up.
Emely chapter 1 . 10/7/2006
Hey,

I thought this poem was very simple but nice.

Once again., lifting my wings.

The period should probably be taken out, although it would probably be good without the period or the comma.

Play with the punctuation. There doesn't need to be a comma after every line, and every line doesn't need to start with a capitalized letter.

I liked this. Good job, and good luck!

~~Emely
Green Wizzerd chapter 1 . 6/8/2005
Interesting and a good discription of a phinox
InSilverShadows chapter 1 . 3/11/2005
Wowzers! Luff it... is it haiku? Oh...nevermind. ((Whoa, deja vu..)) O.o
Tk.T chapter 1 . 3/10/2005
Short and lovely. I liked this so much that I'm going to put it on my fav. stories list. A very well-put-together poem. Congrats!

Happy writing!

Tk.T~
The System Mother chapter 1 . 3/10/2005
OH pretty! I like it a lot _
Bookworm12-8-90 chapter 1 . 3/8/2005
aw... it's so pretty!
Jordy chapter 1 . 3/7/2005
dark! witch means Jordy likes it!i think the best part is "Rising, from scattered ashes,The breath of ages now renewed" well BYE! *Jordy runs of to talk to her minion but runs in to a wall instead*
Macca Lane chapter 1 . 3/7/2005
lovely beless ya, all ica n sat well all i can say is lvoely