Reviews for Forbidden Love
softlycryingrain chapter 4 . 8/25/2005
hmm..interesting story, this is a good start (I am assuming that you'll be writing a lot more for this one _) I love your characters! Especially Kathryn and Wil, since they are the ones you've told us the most about. It really is a shame that Kathryn is engaged to Richard Foxton, though I'm sure she'll break it off for Will, and if she doesn't...well, you'll have some unsatisfied readers! lolOne thing I've been wondering about is where is Foxton? I guess he's already in London doing Parliament stuff, but it would have been interesting if he was on the ship as well...oh wellCaptain Gray was also an interesting character. A horrible troll, but interesting. I'm surprised you killed him off so fast! I think you could have done a bit more with him, if I remember correctly he didn't have a whole lot of dialogue. But I like how you used the mutiny to add some more stress to Will's life, he seems to be doing pretty well with his new captain's job! Very brave with the whole pirates/storm/man overboard that I've written a nice long review that you'll get bored reading I'll just say one more time that you are doing an excellent job, keep it up, and I definitely look forward to reading more!~SCR
LOSTxINSIDExMYxDREAMS chapter 4 . 8/22/2005
Wow I like this story! Pretty interesting, keep it comming!
HeavensLoverBoy chapter 4 . 5/4/2005
oh i love stories like this...keep going!
Stephanie Rose chapter 4 . 4/21/2005
Very well written, especially your descriptions, and you didn’t depend on your dialogue, although it was well done. You have a few grammar mistakes but we all do. I like the shorter chapters, but I felt you were going too fast, throwing information out too quickly. Like the whole mutiny thing. Oh, I liked it and yeah the captain’s a jerk but the mutiny was quite a surprise. And it all happened too fast. Maybe you could try somehow building up to it more. And I felt rushed reading about Kathryn and Will towards the end. Maybe because we missed the whole first three weeks of their “relationship.” Keep it up, I can’t wait to read more. And thanks for reviewing my story.
La Gitane chapter 4 . 4/13/2005
Ooh, a very entertaining story! You gripped me right from the start - both Will and Kathryne seem great characters - and between sweet hugs, hangings, mutinies, and pirates, and chapters that end in cliff hangers, it's all absolutely thrilling!

What's even better is your writing is great too. You have lovely descriptions, and your dialogue, in particular, is very believable.

Well done, and do update... I'm hooked!
Alessandra Lee chapter 4 . 4/10/2005
Suspense! Oh how I loathe suspense. But this story is completely wonderful, I'd be upset if I forget about it, so I'll make a point not to. Can't wait for more.
R.M.Whitaker chapter 4 . 4/10/2005
Woohoo! Go Will! Now there's a real man for ya! This chapter was awsome! So well-written and action-packed! Update again soon!
Kayla Hayes chapter 3 . 3/30/2005
Great Chapter! Mutiny... a mice touch. It added a lot of excitement to the story. A lot has happened in three chapters... I really hope Kathryne gets the guy she wants... Richard seems a bit like a jerk...

Kayla Hayes
Adored Princess chapter 3 . 3/28/2005
A STORM! O! MUTINY MATES! !...oy to much sugar and evil good weather...that made no sense...HEHEHEHEHHEHEHEHEHE!

Okay can't wait till next chapter! Hurry Hurry Hurry!
Nyssa Damaskinos chapter 2 . 3/21/2005
So very very very very very awesome! This is another wonderful chapter...but, I feel so bad that I haven't reviewed sooner than this...I've been so busy with school that I haven't gotten a chance to read anything new lately...don't be mad!

Anyway, they hugged! I know I would have if I had a dashing lieutenant who paid particular attention to me, lol. I love the imagery you used in the chapter, the way you described the hanging, and how you wrote every character seeing the same event and reacting differently.

BTW, this Gray guy doesn't sound like a good character...I hope he doesn't interfere in this budding relationship I see brewing here. You must update soon! (Maybe this time I might actually get an alert saying you have never know, miracles happen!)
J.E.Wyatt chapter 2 . 3/19/2005
wow, love this story. You should continue writing... also - try to make your story longer... if not longer, jsut update faster ;; Yes... well I love this story!

-Lady Notorious
Adored Princess chapter 2 . 3/18/2005
O! I love the meaphors u use and image words. THey rock!...Un poco confused I'll probably get it when u add more chapters!


*stupid science*
Kayla Hayes chapter 2 . 3/16/2005
A hint of mystery... I like it! And they are finally succubing to their attraction... I personally think that Will has more honerable intentions than the lord that Kathryne is supposed to marry.

Kayla Hayes
R.M.Whitaker chapter 2 . 3/15/2005
Oh, how sweet!... and sad!

Just a bit of constructive critisizm if you don't mind it. This part would have been even more romantic if we had seen how Will and Kathryne met and got to watch them slowly begin to fall in love. Right now thier characters aren't exactly known to us, so it isn't quite as enjoyable as it could be.

But it is still a wonderful story so far! I just love it! I love stuff like this! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Kayla Hayes chapter 1 . 3/9/2005
I really like this so far. It really flows well and i love how you make your characters seem real. The plot sounds intresting too.

Anyway, great job!

Kayla Hayes
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