|Reviews for Yearning|
| QueenVixta chapter 1 . 3/17/2005
I really like this one as well. You really captured what you wrote well. Well done, QueenVixta
| A Face Worth Remembering chapter 1 . 3/16/2005
Know the feeling all too wellGreat job
| hiding behind amber eyes chapter 1 . 3/15/2005
me too sister! lol only mine wasn't a break up mines just never going to happen. :( o well keep writing!
| Anna178 chapter 1 . 3/13/2005
Another short but brilliant one. It means alot though. "the love I can never have." powerful.
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 3/9/2005
The ending was so poweful. Beautifully put and amazing.
!~* Noelle *~!
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 3/9/2005
is there purposely a coma at the end? nice and well done
| Rosanna28 chapter 1 . 3/9/2005
Awh, that's so sad! Gave me tears in my eyes actually. Don't know why...
Probably because it's really beautiful eh? _
Much love, Rosanna.
| myno chapter 1 . 3/8/2005
you might want to replace the comma witha period at the end. Other than that, great haiku.
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/8/2005
¿what is it that you dream of persistent?
¿why is this love of yours resistant so?
¿where's female guile—seduction serpentine?
well,—let me see what advice i can give,
be heartless—never contrite with your love,
keep distance—enough to always entice,
be royal—avoid all plebian methods,
think coldly—analyze first, then give heart,
stay pure—whatever comes, keep dignity,
there you go,—that's all that i of love know,
none of it worked for me,—it might for you.
| morbidme chapter 1 . 3/8/2005
its really good but i think its lacking emotion... great job..keep writing...XmeX