really rich; very honest and accurate. great job :)

I don't remember how I found your page, but after reading a few of your poems, this has to be my favorite.

five years later you'll still be pretending

you love him,

that he's at the office like he said. you'll

be watching mtv, not

waiting for anything

but your soap operas.

There's something so sad and pathetic and ultimately real about that. It's not just a prolonged good turn of phrase, it actually means something and resonates. Great job.

Gorgeous. I read this and feel like such an inferior writer. Gosh.

"white spill of/satin purity" - What a breathtaking description of virginity, something so abstract in itself that it's almost impossible to describe, yet here you go, making it so concrete and beautiful. Color me jealous.

This whole thing is gorgeous. I am so obviously favoriting. Your verbs and images are crisp and refreshing. Just fantastic work, as always. Keep writing! :)

jesus. that's... extremely beautiful & amazing... so.. evocative, poetic, ORIGINAL...

you say, i don't know how it happened -

you say, why me?

you say, i don't understand

and you'll break the news to him

while you're kneeling between his legs.

that. that is... gorgeous.

i absolutly love this style, i have read a few other pieces on this sight with this brilliant prose. The first paragraph is nice

I don't know what to say. Wow. The best line, in my opinion by far, was "which is why, i guess, you always keep the receipt." The whole comparison is just fascinating. And the ending… whoa. I can't get over how awesome this is. And I LOVE the title. Everything just fits and flows so well. It's raw, painful, tragic, but somehow holds it's beauty. Amazing, never stop writing.

Perfect title. It took me forever, but im pretty sure I began to understand it. I have to really like something to analyze it like that. Heh... I related to it in a very opposite point of view. Of the nice guy that never did get all he needed when he needed it...

This was so deep and wonderful, especially the beginning. Excellent, keep writing.

deep message, and i'm loving it(maybe i shouldn't copy mcdonald's from now on...hmm.) nicely written!

couldve, wouldve, shouldve, didnt. the motto of every one's life.

Wonderful.

Amazing, you have such a sense of truth to your words, presented to the reader harshly but with a gentle softness as well. You drew me in and still I'm thinking of your words. You are a truly talented writer.

Juliet.

Wow... Touching and it really gets the reader to think. The concept is clever, and I'm assuming that it's one held very close to you.

Very sad. It really makes you see the other side of those people you might brush off as pathetic. This piece just makes you pity them.

Wow. This was beautiful, like everything else you write. I especially like the line, "which is why, i guess, you always keep the receipt." I dunno, it makes everything fit together.

I suppose you can look at my past reviews if you want me to say anything. I don't want to sound repetitive.