Reviews for Detention: A New Kind of Love Story
Raedyn-Halliwell07 chapter 1 . 11/1/2005
Nice story, well written and descriptive, I LOVED it. I hope you continue on your Miami story because it kinda cut off without notice! Hope to see more from you!

Ja ne,Plyo
Kithaniella chapter 17 . 8/23/2005
It's a perfect ending. I'm so glad they found each other and the last paragraph was beautiful. Really amazing story, KUDOS!
Kithaniella chapter 11 . 8/23/2005
That's so sad, favorite line:"You said that you don’t wanna love someone because you don’t wanna get fucked over. Well, goddammit, you’ve done nothin but fuck me over and I still love you anyway. But that’s not enough for you."I love this story...
Kithaniella chapter 8 . 8/23/2005
Quote: "Jason looked at me and the hardness in his eyes softened a little-but only a little. Softly, he said, “No. You’re not the kind of person I want to know Brandon.” Of all the insults and hurtful things anyone had ever said to me, including Chris, that had to be the worst. I felt like my heart had just sunk down to my stomach."

-That is soo my favorite lines, it so sad. Poor B! Back to the reading...
Porn Yesterday chapter 17 . 7/13/2005
Ahh crap, and here's the end...-.-; Sad to see it end but hey! They're back together and all seems well...for now at least, but that's all that matters to me! I enjoyed the ending though, it had a tinge of sadness sure but it was more anti-climatic in a sense, a few things coming together. I liked how you ended it though, it leaves a lot unsaid, especially where everything may head with the relationships and whatnot.

So y'know...in case you want to start a sequel anytime soon ::hint hint:: *_-*

But if you don't that's alright, because I enjoyed this very much so as it lasted.

When I first read it, which was actually quite a while ago, I was a little worried. Considering the degree of smut, I thought that's all it would be. First time I read this, I only got through the first chapter before I had to leave and I never saved the story or anything like that ::slaps herself:: Xx; Not so smart idea on my part but yes. I found it recently just scrounging around the site for new stories to read and I decided, 'why the hell not?' and started reading this again...

...and this is where it led me as you can see.

I, obviously had to read past chapter one to discover yes there was actual plot and it was I who was wrong. ::nervous laughter:: _; In my opinion, the smut was simply an added bonus to this very good story, surprisingly enough. I've gotta give you props and a worshipable bow for your scenes ::bows down in front of your worshipableness:: that was some tough shit, I gotta' say. Thank goodness I had no parents peeking behind my shoulders or...I wouldn't be here right now, more like mangled and bloodied up in a dumpster somewhere...O(-.-)O

Now onto the characters...much love for all of em', from beginning to end really! They were all very familiar in a way that they're characteristicsm, personalities and mannerisms were consistent throughout the story. The only exceptions were when they got sappy, y'know cute lovey moments, few and far between true, but still there. I actually liked Chris's character even from the beginning, as arrogant and stuck-up as he may have seemed. Maybe it's because of the fact you get used to people like that and know people like that in real life too. Some people might complain about the amount of language in this and whatnot. I think it works though, it simply fits. I couldn't imagine most of them, especially Chris ::cough:: not being so vulgar and basically rude. Or maybe I'm just used to gangsterness from my younger brother and older cousins to not really mind it. As if I don't swear enough as it is, I could relate to it all! XD

Hmm, I should probably get a little technical and be a little constructive perhaps? Well I s'pose I'll try...::switches into constructive mode:: Now let's see...what can I comment here. Well there's a few minor typos here and then but nothing big really, and I know how it feels because I'm one who has typos herself so meh, don't mind that! ::shrugs:: The POV switching seemed a little sudden in a way, I didn't expect. In chapter twelve when it was Chris's POV I was actually surprised, but I was pleasantly surprised, not a bad thing of course. It was good to have a few POV's here and then though, because it always help to get a little info here and then from other character's point of view. Especially when it came to the last few chapters, the POV's may have been bothersome for some but I thought it worked out in the end. It created suspense, especially in chapter thirteen and fourteen where it kept switching from Chris to Brandon. It was effective because it had two different plot lines that later would coincide. And it was all really wonder, well for me anyways, is Brandon actually going to bust a nut with Luke? And is Chris going to cheat on Brandon even though he loves him and all? That was a killer for me, if they ever did anything I woulda' been pissed at the both of em'.

But yes all those "technical" comments, well at least trying to be technical here because authors enjoy constructive criticism, were small things, and most of it didn't even end up being criticism! Oo; ::mock gasp::

Oh, but I have a question! ::raises her hand:: Was Eva an actual student? And does she have any connection with Brandon, Chris or either of the characters beside coaxing Brandon to get his man and all that good stuff? First time she popped up in chapter thirteen, I won't lie, I thought she was some ghost or spirit or some shit like that. Pretty random and fucked up huh? But I unno' why I thought that, I just did! And then after that, I thought Aaron was a spirit/ghost too, like Eva; trying to help Chris out. ::sheepish smile:: XB But yeah, she could just be a student right, and all of this is just none needed rambling...

Damn...this is a pretty long review, and I'm sorry you had to go through all this pointless rambling, most of it anyays. If you haven't stopped reading this that is. But ya see, it shows how much I loved this story! Y'know what I'm going to do? I'm surprised you only have 26 reviews, I think you deserve 'oh so' much more than this, you should have 100 at this point, people standing in line trying to read this stuff! When I start posting a few of my slash stories chapters for the next few days, I'll be sure to recommend this story...and I have an even better idea now! ::insert lightbulb here:: ::lightbulb moment:: _! I'll start a little recommended stories section on my profile and there ya go, it'll be on there too!

...Phew! Never knew this story could be so damn inspiring or somethin like this point, I honestly doubt my whole review will be posted. And for that, I will be sure to e-mail this review because yeah...this some good writing!

Well thank you for writing this, and I can't wait to read Miami, I was excited to read that after this! I'll finish it up tonight most likely and review tomorrow morning...but keep writing and keep it up with the much needed man sex! We need more of that in the real, in writing and in our fellow neighbours' homes! ::props:: X3

Status: Greatly satisfied and maybe jus a lil' bit horny...XP lol
forgotten-magick chapter 12 . 6/13/2005
go B, go, go, go B, go, go!

great chapter!
PandaIzumi chapter 13 . 4/25/2005
Evil dad. I hate. I will kidnap and torcher. Poor chris
bambi4real chapter 17 . 4/3/2005
i really loved your story. At first I must admit it sounded like smut to me and I didn't get where you were going with it but you pulled through with the plot in the end. i looked forward to reading it everyday after work.I'm shocked not more people have read it.
Zephyr Tenshi chapter 17 . 3/30/2005
OH MY GOD! This story was too good for words! I am so amazed...this is one of the rare occasions in my life that I am speechless! You have brought out all elements of teen angst and made the most extreme degrees seem the most real! You have such a gift! And the way you left the end wide open is a fantastically genius method to end a beautiful story! I hope to read more of your work very soon! Keep it up!
forgotten-magick chapter 11 . 3/26/2005
god this is sad. how awful for brandon. it's prolly hard on chris as well, but brandon seemed to really believe that he and chris had something going.

this was great.
forgotten-magick chapter 9 . 3/26/2005
another awesome chapter
Sugar Coated Lemons chapter 17 . 3/24/2005
Your story is one of the best stories I have ever read, and I'm not just saying that, I'll probably IM you sometime on 'Supr Managr K'
Esquirella chapter 17 . 3/21/2005
Open ending there, but they did end up together, which is all that really matters. Loved it!
Soren Hawthorne chapter 17 . 3/20/2005
aw! the story ended... overall i liked this story, I'm not partical to Yaoi, but i liked it... it didn't really end sad, it was kinda more a good thing, that they finally made up... thanks for writing it.*Hugs*Annika
Chaneljcoco chapter 17 . 3/19/2005
wow! I am so sad that this ended actually, i loved this story, i will most definitley read EVERYTHING that you post. I cant wait for the next one, and i will let you know when i have my story up.
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