Reviews for Can you help me?
she's not breathing chapter 1 . 3/12/2005
yay. it's poetry that's actually poetic! great poem; it's nice and short, but long enough that it has the feeling and carries it to the reader. i like the third line a lot, and i like the rhyme scheme. actually i didn't even notice that the first time reading it through. and i think that's the first time that's ever happened to me. which is amazing, because that meant it just flowed so well i didn't even realize it had the rhyme doing it. beautiful, in a very simplistic way that i don't think i can explain. do me a favour and check out something i've written?

k8
Serendipitous Passage chapter 1 . 3/12/2005
Short and sweet. Another awsome poem. Great work.

Please R&R some of my work. I'll return the favor.