Great work, both technically (rhyming/meter) and other-wise. Very effective; there's much truth in your words that cannot be denied. I especially love:

"We built this machine to tell our lies,Made from the shattered pieces,It was made to muffle the criesAs mortality rate increases."

Keep it up!

I am glad i read this...it was great and the words harnessed so much truth...i definately love this coz it really awakens you to the world...so yer, in short, well done and awesum work_ Keep writing and thanks 4 da review_

It's like a picture... half description based, and half just feeling. Nice work.

Wow, very nice. Great description and insight. Society sucks, rock on! _

Bunny