Whoa...I love it. It's disturbingly emotionless, but in a good way. Like you're an impartial observer watching her die. It adds a tone of creepiness to the work.

whoa that was really good *adds to list of faves* this piece was very well written adn yes i did enjoy it

I loved the ending, a single note a single tear a single memento the end is now here. Takes my breath away

Hauntingly similar to the feelings of a dear friend of mine. Your writings are very passionate even when they are dark. You write what you feel, and most of the time that turns out the best work.

Very powerful and sad...

Nice work.

BTW I'm a girl, not a guy. :D

Wow. I'm speech less (I can still type though :) ). I wish the best for you.~Berzerk108

you did a great job, I can so relate to that poem!

wow, this is definately going on my favorites list! i usually don't like ryme poems, but this one...i dont know it has something. awesome poem, keep writing!

ps-thanx 4 the review would u plz read more of my stuff and let me know wut u think. ill post more soon hopefully!

oh *Silver tears stream down my cheeks*!thats so pretty. so sad, though, i'll use my favourite word; haunting. nice way to rhyme; some people use rhyme and it doesn't work, not so for you! no, seriously, this is really good. sad though. nice. poetic. i like

Wow, i must say i'm impressed! the rhyming work splendidly~~ and the flow was great! Awesome job~

keep writing!

simply fantasitc. it is truly beyond words.

Wow... Wow... (mouth hangs open stupidly) Wow... That was-powerful.

So sad! I'm very impressed by this piece. I love the 5th stanza (All his sweet words...his mind's spinning clutches). I like the imagery you use to depict her emotions/motives, as well as the guy's. Good work! You are now officially one of my favorite authors!~Trenton K. Fox.

wow I like this!a 's short and has a nice rythm (i have no idea to write that word. anyway)

Thanks a lot for reviewing my poem :) I didn't think I'd get reviewed so fast!

Wow, powerful stuff in this one. You conveyed a very real and strong emotion in this poem, one I'm all too familiar with. However, even with the sad story, a well-put forth and powerful poem.

-Shadow Link