Reviews for Unfair
method acting chapter 1 . 3/27/2005
wow. awesome :-)
Unfairy chapter 1 . 3/24/2005
Interesting piece. I think it needs some refining as far as the style goes, it is very outward and hard to grasp. Otherwise I like it. The fact that you put so much into this person and then apologize for it is oddly striking.
Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 3/22/2005
Nothing's fair in love and war... goodness. Very heartfelt and pleading, thius peice. Good job.
Squirrel Lejant chapter 1 . 3/19/2005
very nice, i like it. one suggestion though. in the part where it says "Why didn’t you stop me sooner?/Why didn’t you stop it sooner?" i would personally switch it so it says "Why didn’t you stop it sooner?/Why didn’t you stop me sooner?" it just makes a bit more sense to go backwards chronologically in this case. tc and keep writing,-Ev