I love the in depth description, very vivid imagery. Can't wait till the story plot unfolds, update soon!

Nice, I see some good conflict about to come *rubs hands maliciously* This is certainly going to be good. You know what, if he was 'engaged' to Tianna but falls in love with Caelia... that would be great lol. Sorry, I just keep rammbling on ;o) but it's just an idea. Wait, scratch that, I want to see how this turns out without my weird thoughts coming in lol.

Are you freaking psychic? I updated too and you do as well lol. Yeah, definitely a funny coincidence!

Hmm I loved this: “There’s your bread, darlingest daddykins,” Aww his vein throbbing in his head... may be it'll burst some day *smiles innocently* Love it so far. I can sense some great things coming on - but what was that dinner about woman? Avoided it P At least she has her brother there to protect her lol. That's how all older brothers are in a way. Update soon! Can't wait for more. L8er,

~Bubblegum

PS. Thanks for reviewing my stuff. I really appreciate it D

hey this again is really good...i cant wait to see wut happens to caelia in the next chapter... her not so charming prince i think is gonna turn things around!

Oh gosh. I didn't review this chapter! So sorry. But anyway! I'm waiting for all the romantic fluffiness to come in! :) Roar, I could just strangle the father! So annoying. But update soon!

Wow, I'm speachless. The description at the beginning was awesome. It was so easy on the imagination - I cound view a whole different world in my mind. You're wonderful!

Hmm she didn't keep one other option in mind: her! Someone her dad wants her to get engaged too or meet. Either way, it's a bad bad thing :( Oh or may be he could turn out to be a nice, loving, gentle soul... lol I think I over did it. Well, let's see.. maybe it'll help her get over the sadness that's within her.

GOod luck with this and update soon. It has a lot of potential,

~Bubblegum

yay! you updated! This is such a cute story. i love it. It sort of reminds me of Ella Enchanted, which is a really good book, but I like this story better. I love the Brother/Sister relationship they have, I think i should be that nice to my sibs. too huh? haha. Well, gah. I hate her dad already and I haven't actually met him yet. bof. Um, What's the dinner for? Is pops getting married again or is Caelia going to be engaged? O, I'm exicted for more! Great work!

Very nice so far; your prologue had some very beautiful, eloquent descriptions. :) I am already anticipating the introduction of her love interest...it will be intersting to see what he is like :)

awe man! poor thing! Wow. I could picture everything you wrote, great imagery. I feel really awful for her though, that her mom died. ((frowns)) I don't know, I always get sad thinking about family deaths. heehe. Well, can't wait for more! This is really really good. I hope to see more soon! ((goes to log in and put you on alerts))

Oo! Thanks for reviewing my story! ha.

so far its really good brenn. keep writing just the way you are and it'll be even better. you have a very good prologue that hooks the reader and gives them the curiosity to finish it. keep up the good work!

kate

It wasn't bad at all, it was very good for one of you first stories... if you need any help, feel free to email me,

I'm not one to give out harsh critism because I thought this beginning was very well done! :) Keep updating will you please?