Reviews for In the Midst of a Ransom
tigoamy2 chapter 11 . 5/31/2005
O! Suspense! I likey. For a second there I actually thought that the kids might have gotten away... but it was too easy so I knew something was going to happen. That's interesting though, how did two kids, a policeman, and four criminals get into the car? I mean that's seven people...wait...never mind. It seemed like a lot but then I realized I was wrong. XD. Well I hope you get the next one out soon! PS: Lucky you. My school lets out in like 2 weeks. Rawr. Kudos, Chelly
tigoamy2 chapter 10 . 5/26/2005
So so so so so so great! They were escaping! FOR REAL! And them BOOM! No more escaping. I love it! They are so close... and yet so far away... I can't WAIT until next time! Sorry about your grounding-ness. I hope you get ungrounded son! Kudos, Chelly
tigoamy2 chapter 9 . 5/20/2005
AH YOU WILL DIE! Just kidding! XDThis was, yet again, another great chapter. Although it was a bit shorter than I suspense! Maybe Paul is too stoned to understand anything? That'd be great. They could really escape then!I feel so sorry for Azra. Poor girl, all beat up like that. Terrible thing that is.I'll be sad when the story ends, but then I'd also be happy because...it's that mixed feeling kind of thing. You know? You I can't wait for the next chapter!Kudos,Michelle
Pedizzle chapter 8 . 5/10/2005
Ah saeo,don't be discouraged. Just work hard and try to learn from others that posess great literary talents. If I may offer a suggestion: Your writing will dramitically improve once you find deeper, more elequent ways to describe events in your story. Here's an example, instead of saying "There was an ear splitting scream. Hands dug around for Tobias, but he flung the crowbar wildly in all directions, and whether he was hitting ground or flesh, he didn't know." say something like, "Screams of rage jarred Tobias into a terrified panick. He felt the strong hands of the men grope violently for his body. Fear and disperation controlled Tobias' flailing arms as they whirled the iron bar in erration motions of destuction. All reasonable thoughts vanished as Tobias resorted to the primal methods of a cornered animal in order to ensure his survival; not knowing whether he was striking flesh or the cracked pavement of the road." Or something like that. Your story could turn into something valuable with a little more spit and polish.
tigoamy2 chapter 8 . 5/9/2005
AH I feel loved! Just like your story! XDOmg drunken men are scary...don't let him do anything REALLY bad! But don't make him do nothing either. Because then it would be disappointing to have a drunken man that doesn't go on a drunken rampage! another WOW for Tobias! He almost KEELED those guys! Hell yes. They deserved it. Are they gonna come back or just be out of the picture for the rest? O I can't wait. Update faster or I may have to threaten you. Wait... wasn't that a threat? Oh well! :PI'll make sure you update too...because I have you on author alert so I'll know when you do... I'll bug you forever if you don't... XDWONDERFUL!Kudos,Michelle
tigoamy2 chapter 7 . 5/7/2005
OMG I HATE JENKINS!I want to throw him into a pit of fire...with sharks in it. Flaming sharks of doom.I'm so excited to see what happens next!I really do love 't wait for the next chapter!UPDATE SON!Kudos,Michelle
tigoamy2 chapter 6 . 5/7/2005
Hmm...from which direction are they dragging the kids? Oh DAMN that Tobias is one smart cookie. I like cookies. *eats cookies*I'm still all excited. Can't WAIT for the next chapter. Well actually it's already here because I'm reading this in one big chunk!KudosMichelle
tigoamy2 chapter 5 . 5/7/2005
WA! Do you like to injure their heads? Just wondering. XDBleh! Ammonia smells...bad! I was scared of what they would do to her. DON'T LET THEM DIE!That telepathy is cool. Different from what I've read ,Michelle
tigoamy2 chapter 4 . 5/7/2005
This is so suspenseful. I absolutely love it! This is definitely going on my favorites list!What will happen to Tobias? If he dies I'm gonna cry. I hope they don't do anything too bad to Azra either!I'm all tingly from excitement! lolKudos,Michelle
tigoamy2 chapter 3 . 5/7/2005
Barbed wire? What kind of cruel, heartless person are you to subject a child to that kind of torture? You're supposed to use fire! Didn't your teachers teach you anything? XDThis kid is pretty smart for 12. Most kids would scream then run around then run after the people then hide then go get their ,Michelle
tigoamy2 chapter 2 . 5/7/2005
AHH! That could KILL a person!And ESPN? Extra Sensory Perception Network? lol.I love this story so far. It's great!I cant' wait to see what happens!Oh the suspense is killing me!Kudos,Michelle
tigoamy2 chapter 1 . 5/7/2005
O...I'm excited!
Pumbaa chapter 7 . 4/17/2005
Great story but what really annoyed me was that you used ESPN instead of ESP. ESPN is a channel on television. ESP is the psychic power. I haven't read the last bit of it but it is great so far considering that one little thing. Don't worry. It's a common mistake.
aknightsgoldenrose chapter 4 . 4/16/2005
I haven't read all of it yet but so far its pretty good. I know you said they were twelve but the way they think makes them seem so much younger..*shrugs* maybe thats just me.
godsgurl chapter 7 . 4/1/2005
You are very welcome. I think this has to be my favorite chapter so far. it's really coming along very well.
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