Wow, you are absolutely amazing. I have tried and tried and tried to make a poem like this. Just, to sum up the little things in life that make me happy. And i never could. Then I stumble upon this and it leaves me breathless. I love it. Continue to write!

true what is life without simple pleasures

So true. This is beautifully written

Again, good rhyming and theme, but rhythm could use work in places; mostly trimming.A list of places:First stanza, line four has a couple too many syllables, but you can probably get away with it stanza, line three doesn't quite make grammatical sense. Third stanza, line four could be revised to "The lash of noise from a slamming door" for a more pronounced stanza, second line - remove 'baseball'. Your readers still know what you mean, and it fits better. Also, minor error in the third line: it's Lie, not lay (unless you really are putting feathers down on the grass).Last stanza, first line: perhaps change 'satisfaction' for a shorter word, like 'joy'?Rhythm can be as important as rhyme in a poem, and can be just as hard to master. Keep at it, and good work.

This was cute. It kinda felt fifties-esque. In that homegrown, serial-killer-with-a-smile way. Simple pleasures? Music, friends, and that look people give you when you burn the American flag.

Keep on goin' with those rhymes!

First stanza was the most powerful. Great job on this.

What a sweet poem! It wAS EXActly (grr..caps lock) what I needed to hear today! Thanks for your review too!

hm, this has broadened my perspective. life doesn't suck that bad for me, I guess. very well written.

and secondly, I wish to thank-you for reviewing 'Broken'. I wasn't really expecting anyone to like it, seeing as I'm all depressing and stuff. oh well, it's just something I wanted to get off my chest. so thank-you

Well done! Yes, it is cute! You play on the senses well, and I'm impressed you managed to write so many verses! It's really good. And thankyou very much for the review... though that's not my best so it would be great if you looked at some others...

it is very good! I liked it alot, the rythum is nice too, it flows well and the meaning is awesome- lifes little pleasure, hehe, love it!

This is so very cute... makes you just want to go "awe" I Love this, it's so sweet in it's simplicity. can we say " FAVE. LIST!" because i can _

It was good, simple. I liked how you brought out really pleasant, wonderful little things in life.

Thank you SO much for the kind review. I was really interested to hear you have a FanFiction name and love Harry Potter. So do I. I'm NotreDamegirlie on that website, but I wouldn't suggest reading my stuff, it's all Draco/Hermione. ;-)

Good call on that one! Oh, sweet irony! This piece is genius, I love it! It reminds me of some pieces I've written. Feel free to check them out.

cute and very true. loved it!:-)