This is so funny!

hi. great story. you might want to update with more than one word, amusing though it is.

Heya, this story is pretty interesting except this chapter. 'Hello' is too predictable. Anywho, I thinkt he story would benefit from a quick spell check by eye not computer because 'defiantly' was used where 'definitely' would go and a computer could care less(and possibly you too.) So far I like it, except chapter 5.

liz this story is so good so far please update soon

Hahaa. This is great. :D

squeel my edward! _

I like it. I like it alot. The only main big problem is it's hard to follow who's who in this chapter. YOu just sort of threw everyone into the story at once. I do agree with you re-writing this chapter. Compared to the other two this one seems more messy. You have real talent, you just need to do some cleaning up. Altogether it looks like your going to go great places with this guy. I look forward to seeing more :).

LIZ! i love this story its really good my Ch2 should be up soon so dont worry