Reviews for Vaden
Ahemait chapter 3 . 12/13/2005
yay, i can write a review. you best be happy, i give you reviews! damn horrible people on this site write like shit, and then when you review them, they dont review you back. grr. and i'm ranting, not screamign about you. moving on. i like the song you added at the beginning, so thats cool. and i know that yous said in the fist chapter that you knew vaden, but you didnt really KNOW know him him, yet it sounds like you guys are best friends, or used to be. and it also sound slike you were trained or grew up with or whatver the same people. and if i'm wrong and youre' what-the hell' -ing me, remember i read this either friday or saturdya and i dont remember every detail. enough talk, bore dnow
eyes of sky chapter 1 . 11/10/2005
i just feel like the rhymes are trying a little too hard, do you understand what i mean?
androssganon chapter 1 . 11/3/2005
Interesting. I liked it! But how did you get so many freaking reviews? I've only got one!
Broken Melody chapter 1 . 11/1/2005
Very interesting stuff.
Broken Melody chapter 2 . 11/1/2005
I think the writing is mysterious and beautiful.
Ahemait chapter 2 . 10/31/2005
ooh! something's wrong! is my little kyenn in wuv? (i say this because of the load of romantic stories or scenes youve been writing) but it's good. i LOVED this: Your being is composed of a few pieces only. You may think of yourself highly, and so may others, but you are not a beautiful symphony. All you are is a couple of pretty notes that everyone awes over without cause. You are not complete without that cause—without reason. And seeing as you are looking at me like I am a fool, I can tell you will never find the grounds alone. Your composer has forgotten: there are some things more important than appearances
Bric The Great chapter 3 . 10/30/2005
This is pretty good. I really liked the poem at the begining. Keep up the good work and update soon.
Infection chapter 1 . 4/22/2005
Loved, it totally wicked.
Dahlia Wolffe chapter 2 . 4/4/2005
Hmm..Interesting. Good work here, chum. Nothing I can really give you CC on- at all. Great job on keeping you stuff together. This is very interesting and the fact that you started it out with a poem is even more intriging. I hope you post more soon cause I'm getting into it now.-Yin
Dahlia Wolffe chapter 1 . 4/4/2005
Cool. I like that you said it was written on a rainy day when you were bored, and it was random. I feel you. So much of my stuff is written at times i'm bored and it's random. I can feel you on that. And this poem is great too. It can be applied to so much stuff- and it seems like, if Hollywood had it's say, all the Asian martial artists would come out of the woodwork with their gi's and weapons, ready to kill people. Lol. Good job.-Yin
Ahemait chapter 2 . 3/27/2005
your titles for the chapters are screwed up. besides that. the poem was brilliant...though i already read it!
Oni Starwind chapter 2 . 3/27/2005
Great job. You got the first person veiw down pack. Update soon.
Ahemait chapter 1 . 3/25/2005
vaden is a cool name. this is interesting. i think that you are trying to have too much describtion, and it's not working for you. the first paragraph is what i mean, the rest are great. i liked the line:It caressed my face...a gentle touch despite its potential power. i've never seen someone write something like that so thats good. dont think i'm being a bitch, i'm trying to help. so over all it was a good piece, not the best in the world or of yours, look it over, work on it, and it'll probably get better. did you say you needed a storyline? give me a review or email with your reply and i can try to help you out
mercury pridestar chapter 1 . 3/24/2005
I like it! Awesome! Sorry I'm kinda lost for words. Keep it up
shishia345 chapter 1 . 3/24/2005
Wow...That was great! I really liked the last statement. You have a way with words! _