Reviews for Internal Illness |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, just finished reading the story! In my opinion it was well written, very well written! Your story was very engaging I started reading this morning and couldn't stop... I give it (and you as the author) a 14 out of 10! (Is that possible? Aww well.) Looking forward to reading your other stories, until then my eyes have reminded me that I have been staring at a computer screen for over 11 hours. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked this story alot. Inm re-reading it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'll try to keep reading later. I like how it started, aside from some random typing errors. The idea seems unique to me, even though there are plenty of stories about magical schools/teachers/institutes whatever. Your characters already have some depth to them, which is cool since I've only read the first chapter. And your word choice makes the story pleasant to read. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So far so good. I'm enjoying this story, and can relate because one of my good friends and mentor is a teacher. The grammer is agreeable, and the characters already have detailed faces thanks to your descriptions. I do have to add one thing, though for the following line: "Hanging from her shoulder was a worn leather satchel that she was hardly ever spotted without. It held all her healing herbs, bandages and commonly-needed medicines..." It's my guess that she may have a collection of certain herbs and medicines from her supplies that she's always carries around -the ones she knew would have the most potent and immediate properties. If she carried everything with her, what else would be in her office, or lab? Say someone needs immediate medical attention -what she has will sustain them until she can get the patient back to her office. Think "EMT" here. Other than that, so far so good. :) |
![]() ![]() Wow Jer...just...wow. MIA!*TACLKE* I loved it. Time a billion. It was damn M FUCKING AZING! Times a trillion! I'm hyper! Love you! |
![]() ![]() Wow I can't believe it's over I demand a sequel... Or else! Thanks for the read. ~Fred |
![]() ![]() *claps* Very nice. Quite humorous though it will need the usual minor grammatical and conventional tailoring. A job well done indeed. Am I seriously to take this to mean that it's all just...over? O.O Or is this just your excuse to give Riggs TWO stories? XD |
![]() ![]() So, dude. No joke, this story TOTALLY rocked! And if I do say so myself, it was an honor to read it. *bows flamboyantly*. Yeah, I know, only I could fit flamboyantly into a story review. And Riggs! Because I KNOW he's reading this over your shoulder Mia: I'm so glad your not going to be bleeding everywhere when you and Saph conceive your first child... Oh please. Have you ever known me to be subtle? *GASP* We could ALL take care of the baby! *giggles madly* Loves Ya Babycakes... And Riggs. Ms. Lingerie |
![]() ![]() Oh goodness! I hope I'm not taking up your time or anything Ma'am but this is an absolutely amazing piece of literature! Excuse my excitement Ma'am I hope my glee does not offend you. If you don't mind Ma'am I'd like to tack it up on my wall (If Jasons Dad's would allow me to defile their property in such an egregious manner that is)! Oh very well done Ma'am, thank you for allowing me the privilege to read such a marvelous piece of work. Love, Sincerely, Teague |
![]() ![]() They couldn't find Instructor Cal. Did they find him eventually? or his body (gulp)? Good story. Very, very funny and light. All together amusing and a great read for a happy mood. Your characters are amazing. Btw, you always misspelled "staring," you spelled it as "starring." Just FYI. Fantastic Work! |
![]() ![]() So Jason totally doesn't have a mom.. she has two adopted fathers and a bunch of other adopted lots of race siblings, you probably don't remember the character sketh thing. But anyways, that was a kind of sad chapter.. but defenatly still good |
![]() ![]() Eva: BWAHAHAHAHA oh man Daddy you rock. xD Love the chappy dearest! I want and epilogue _ And then the next year. |
![]() ![]() *clings to chapter desperately* Don't go! Haha, Sarah you are quite amazing. This is quite the accomplishment and I do demand that you send me a CD of all the files so that I may promptly have them bound for you It was wonderful my dear, a toast! To trouble-makers, sword fighting, and a little bit of bread here and there. Hurray! Hurray! Hurray! |
![]() ![]() Did you know in the midwinter chapter 3 bottles of wine suddenly turn into five bottles half way through? |
![]() ![]() “What a shitty restaurant…” heehehe you didn't tell me you wrote a new chapter! |