Your detail is often concise. I find that a very applaudable talent. In terms of the story, I am having difficulty following your intent. I am guessing its not finished. What I wonder, is what is the significance of the cocaine? For someone so quiet, does he take lines for the intent of social contact or a lift to gather thoughts? I also am curious as to (maybe I missed it, I am listening to music which might have an impact on my reading) the language of the narrator in the beginning. It was flowing almost sing-song, and it seems to cut out later. Am I just too distracted and tired (my bad I got like at most 3 hours of sleep last night) or did you change it?

I can clearly hear your voice in your work after reading a few poems and shorts.

I believe you have a talent that I am interested in following, its nice to read your stories and see how you establish environments and flesh out characters.