Reviews for She and They
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 4/5/2005
nice. a tad confusign at first but nicely done :) i liked it
Clap Clap Raise Your Hands chapter 1 . 4/2/2005
interesting poem, nice ending, i like all the "will she", "will he" etc, the last 8 lines are the best, especially the bit about the mirrow,really clever x weasel within x
Karma Chameleon chapter 1 . 4/2/2005
"So behind the achesShe is enthralled by himSo behind the mirrorThere’s a feeling within."

I don't think you need the "So" in the beginning of each of these lines. Some of the rhyme sounds a bit forced. Remember to let the rhyme come to you, or just leave it behind. It's not as important as the words and meaning of the poem. Anyway, keep up the good work! I want to read more :) Karma Chameleon
thedarkthatiwas chapter 1 . 4/1/2005
Neat... short review I know sorry, but, yes, I like!
Sorrowful Dreams chapter 1 . 4/1/2005
very emotional and heartfelt. It has a lot of meaning and is very touching. It has a story flow to it, very nice!