|Reviews for Out of Customs|
| Plinky chapter 1 . 6/17/2006
I like the short version better, I think, although the longer one is beautiful too, the shoter one just made me smile.
Both beautiful poems though. :D
| Cedric Quilfeather chapter 2 . 4/6/2006
I wish I had something more to say than: It's really beautiful. But I don't, so, I'll leave it at that.
It's really beautiful. _ The abstractism is there, but gentle enough not to jar the reader. I commend it highly.
| Cedric Quilfeather chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
Heh. Sorry, can't see any reason to NOT like it, lol . . .
| simpleplan13 chapter 2 . 3/20/2006
I like this.. the water fish thing is very unique and awesomely written
| Chandra-Moon chapter 2 . 3/18/2006
This is truly amazing. The beginning especially is one of those rare poems that makes no sense and perfect sense all at the same time. At the end, I thought the poem got a bit rambling (probably from the stanza beginning with "I left you whole" on). It wasn't bad writing, but it was different from the beginning, where every line was sharp and fresh in your mind. It just got less interesting.
"When skies were wet with stars." What a beautiful image.
| Chandra-Moon chapter 1 . 3/18/2006
Wow, I agree, what a wonderful idea and image. Beautiful.
| saber-toothed jellybean chapter 1 . 8/10/2005
"when the sky/ was wet with stars" I like that. It could be a reflection, or a painting. Or a person, lost in a crowd of millions who seem to know where they are.
The sky and a fish. Two objsects that seem not to relate, but do. It leaves one to wonder.
| charedice chapter 1 . 5/31/2005
while sitting on a barstool/ and old man slipped me the joker/ though I wasn't playing cards. for some reason, this reminded me of that. you need to write it into a massive saga.. so fun. me and a friend wrote 4 pages about a green beaver and his mushrooms once.
| Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 5/5/2005
Nice and random yet made perfect sense. Great job.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 4/4/2005
well i do like it, but to play devils advocate... it is friggin complicated lol
| swtdreamz101 chapter 1 . 4/3/2005
interesting, fish are cool, nice poem
| Neaera chapter 1 . 4/3/2005
i like the imagery...so you met a fish huh? or is that just metaphorical? well any ways, i like it!
| wishingdreamingwaiting chapter 1 . 4/3/2005
I've met fish who've known not where to swim... :-P Ahh, but I enjoyed this! And I also wanted to thank you for pointing out my typo! (Trendsetter) Thanks a bunch!
| SomeCowgirl chapter 1 . 4/3/2005
This is different, short but sweet. I'm not much for short poetry, but this captured me. Very nice, the fish, well it was different. It fit though, very good!