Very, very good! I wrote a story a bit similar to this, which I find weird.

It reminds me of Morrissey.

superb! AWOO!

awesome :) very imaginative (big word for me) :P hehe anyways its really cool :D luv yo0 ashwey x

excelent story

Cool 1st chapter. Its so dark and depressing _ I LOVE IT!

that was really good. i want to know what happens, so you best write more, cos i know where you, er, yeah...go to school! so you best write more. try write it like, i dunno. sorry, im not good at review things. maybes like, write shorter sentences to make it more effective, cos itll give a sense of lik, urgentness stuff. like i said, im not good at reviews, but hope that helped. x

This was very short but I liked the description a lot. I feel sorry for Jason, I would never want to have dreams like that, thankfully I don't but this is good so update the next chapter soon!