I looked at this story and saw a description of myself :O

Looking forward tp more

Well, I love it is all I can say :D

Laura promises to be an interesting character to read about. I look forward to reading more.

PUBLISH! Yeah, I know, this story's been finished for a while, but I couldn't help myself! I absolutely loved the story, and although it could use some editing, you did an excellent job! I couldn't put it down, as to why I'm reviewing at 11:30pm! I thoroughly enjoyed your work, and will head over to your page and check out your other stories!

Hey there - I love the folk flavour you've infused into this story so far! I'm sorry if you've mentioned it in author's notes - I'm so anxious to read the rest of your story that I (unfortunately) skip them - but was the Rochester and the willow split in half by lightning reference an allusion to Jane Eyre? It's wonderful.

Not sure if you did this on purpose or not, but:

Jane EyreMr. RochesterJane Rochester.

I also want to say how much I thoroughly enjoy reading this story, though! :)

love the finishing sentance

Loved it Loved it and Loved it more. I want a sequel where one of their children go back to Ireland or something. Great story.

Aw such a sweet story!

xx

I hate to say that I'm one of those people who reads without reviewing, but I am. In your case, however, I feel compelled to respond, in a good way, of course! Firstly, I can practically see Laura's head popping and her wrist flicking like a New York street girl, and I love it! The fact that you can give that impression without explicitly stating Laura's expression is awesome and noteworthy. The second reason for this review is that, unlike a lot of original fiction that ends up being just decent if you're avoiding your homework, I can actually see this story being pulled from the site and actually published. If that's your ultimate goal, then more powah to yah, girl!

Happy writing,

TomatoFace :D

Aw! I love it! Its really good!

Naw, absolutely not cornball. If your story was cornball then any story would be cornball. Every love story happens like that. You've progressed wonderfully. However, it does seem odd how Matthew always seems to save her (the "lake" and in this storm)... Maybe you should change that a bit?...

But here was one sentence I could not understand: "His wet shirt stuck to his arms and chest, showing off his finely toned muscles." Somehow I can't imagine Matthew with "finely toned muscles". It just doesn't seem realistic. I know you're trying to get him to sound like the perfect hero but this isn't Matthew's taste. Especially since he is a doctor and all.

Anywho I had to stifle an amused laugh when I read of another parallel between you and Jane Austen's book. I've never read the book Sense and Sensibility (just watched the movie) but there is a part where Mr. Willoughby saves Marianne in a storm, her leg broken. lol.

I've been waiting forever for that kiss. Yes, Matthew is slowly beginning to poke out of his shell. So glad!

In answer to your question, no, there was definitely nothing "corny" about this chapter! My heart sort of caught in my throat when I read (or should I say "lived"?) the conversation between Matthew and Laura. I myself believe that I am falling more in love with Matthew as I go. And especially now my heart is at its breaking point when I hear of Matthew's despair. I can see him...and wish I can hold out a hand, say something... He seems so much like a character I am trying to work out. He too is a doctor, serious in some ways, intelligient in others, smart, quiet, but also charming. If you won't mind, I'll be taking pointers from you. ;)

One thing I did not understand... Why did Laura try to make Matthew jealous?

Love how the romance just keeps building up! I let out an inward scream of delight when I learned this chapter was another one concerning Laura and Matthew. Some authors on fictionpress skip the development of love, and move to the action. So sad, isn't it? But excited that yours is otherwise!