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![]() ![]() Again. I HATE REIVIN! It was a good chapter! I'm a little confused, though. Did Arli go with them, or not? Davin... I miss him... Next? |
![]() ![]() o.o *wimper* _ Those are my feelings about this chapter. Now for the technicalities. Well written. Enough to bring tears to my eyes. Uhg... I HATE REIVIN! Anway, well written chapter. I didn't like it, because I loved Davin. Next... |
![]() ![]() I hate Reivin... Do you know that? Anyway, I love this chapter! So many details, so many visuals. And the emotion really gets to you. From the earlier chapters to now, your writing REALLY improved. Happy days! Next one! |
![]() ![]() I love fluff. Fluff fluff fluff! It's adorable. The beginning bogs a little bit, but the ballroom scene was perfect! Next! |
![]() ![]() Davin's evil. I swear he is. Or maybe you are. Ending a chapter like that? "Do you love Sarah?" You make me want to read on, SO much! But no, I have to review. XP Anyway, this is also a good chapter, really showing that Atticus DOES love Sarah, and that he would be lost without her. Also, it gives the hint that the dragons know a little bit more about 'Matt' than they realize. Next! |
![]() ![]() More Fluff! I hope you know, I love it when you do that between Atticus and Sarah. They're made for each other, as I've said numerous times. So, The Demi-god was there after all. Now why is he buring this town? Vigil was because it was full of sorcerers. But this one? I'm confused. Anyway, we got fluff out of it! Bring on the Fluff! |
![]() ![]() I love Davin. Using his wings to get the girl, huh? *laughs* It's SO like him. I easily could see him doing that again. Atticus... Poor him. Always getting cut up, spelled, nearly killed. That's his life, I suppose, though. Next chapter! ((By the way, just how many hybrids ARE there?)) |
![]() ![]() FLUFF! I love fluff between those two! Squee! Anyway, again, I loved this chapter! More than all the rest, I'd say. It's the first time, really, that Sarah's taken a stand and supported Matt, Atticus, actually. I think I'll start using his real name... I hope I remember to do that... I wouldn't change a THING. Completely serious. I think that anything that you would add or take away might just change it too much. I love it! Next chapter... I'll miss this one... |
![]() ![]() O_o I had COMPLETELY forgotten about that detail... TWIST! Lets do the TWIST! *laughs* Again, last chapter and this one REALLY show what Matt is 'made' of. It really shows a lot of insight about the story, how it start, ect. Next! |
![]() ![]() Davin the half-breed. I remembered that a little bit. Now that the group is back together, it's a good thing. With Davin around, there's always a little bit of 'fun' going on. *laughs* Anyway, The details in the chapter are good. You can probably realize that I LOVE details. Details fill out the story. They are what separates a good story from a great story. And then there's Sarah. She has to soak SO much information about Matt that's she gone silly. Oh well. Next chapter! |
![]() ![]() Matt had been killed. Oh fun. I'd completely forgotten about that tiny little detail. Some reader I am, huh? I wouldn't change ANYTHING about this chapter. I found it to be just as good as the revised ones in the beginning! Keep up the awesome Work! And UPDATE! *laughs* |
![]() ![]() Oh Raetus... I remember him a little bit. He is QUITE the little devil, now isn't he? *laughs* I really like this section. It shows a little more into Matt's past, more of why he's on his quest, who is REALLY is, and how he came to, well, BE. Next one! |
![]() ![]() I remember that part now! Matt buying a TOWN to satisfy Sarah and her parents, but of his own accord. He's just BEGGING for her to come after him, I swear. MORE FLUFF! Yey! I like it when you write little bits of fluffy stuff with Matt and Sarah. It's cute! Those two were made for each other. That town owner was rotten to the core. When the deed was bought, did Matt buy the town AND the mansion, or just the town? If the Mansion was part of the deal, then they could change that into, say, a town hall of something with A LOT of tweaking. Keep up the AMAZING Work, Kitai! I love your stories! |
![]() ![]() More Sarah-Matt Fluff! I love it! Those two need to get together, though I love how they are just a little hesitant. I can't wait to see what Matt will do about the town. I vaguely remember it, but I need to see if I'm right or horribly wrong. Onto the next one! |
![]() ![]() Oh yes. Atticus strikes again! Literally? *laughs* Awesome chapter. I wouldn't change a thing. I'm serious. Maybe a little here and there, but the over-all is good. I wouldn't change it at all. I'll need to check the index. Maybe there could be a section on Just Spells. Just as a "Here's all the spells if you want to know them." thing. |