Strangely written - the end of this chapter was.. unusual. Contrived. The plot seems to be well thought out as if it suddenly slots together.

Great story. I can't wait for more chapters. Very creative and descriptive i give it 5 stars *.

it very very good! i very confused though. is the leader the princess? why did you have them in the same chapter then? p.s. make sure you update. oh, and clean your room.

OMG! You are the best writer! I love your story! Please keep posting! ;-D Love ya Bre ;-D No but on a serious note, I seriously love your writing!

-Tiger Lily

I like this. I like it a lot. Really though, there's such intrigue here and the story feels so original, very nice writing too, precise but great wording. Keep it up! :)

i really like your story. who's the person you wrote it with? jojo something? her invalueable editing skills must have done a lot cause editors really do more than the authors them selves. so make sure you include it in your next chapter!

i just want everyone to know that my invalueable editing skills helped a lot in writing this story and bree you should put my name out there more! yeah i know you dont want a review from me and your rollong your eyes right now but read it anyway! and guess what WE GOT A REVIEW!

i am really confused. i don't have a clue what is going on. but i really like your writing style. it's short and sweet. I mostly write like that to. people tell me i should change that. don't listen to people who say that. your great! awesome style!(thanks for reviewing my story. Jack will tell soon enough. don't worry. Katherine will see him soon.)

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just so you know everything does start making more sense and i will explain everything in the other chapters

as of now the chapters are kinda short but they will get longer and the story does improve to the point where u can actually understand what i'm talking about

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