OHHHH I DONT KNOW IF TO HATE YOU OR TO ADORE YOU! I READ HE WHOLE SORY IN JUS ONE AFTERNOON! I HAVE SO MANY EMOITONS BOTTLED INSIDE!
Now, my critic:
fine prose
very good fictional adaptation both in scenary, and vocabulary
the pot was quite easy topredict at the beginning but it turned out to have a lot of twist
thecharacters are not the most originals, but different in their kind, Aliana looks likethe damsel in distress from the beginning but she was actually strong...and Cicario...oh my, he will be my standard of boyfriend from now on! But I have to say something about him, and it's about his name, I doub you know but in spanish "sicario" is pronounced the same as your "Cicario" and means assasin...very ironic, takng in consideration the plot.
I do not know if you finishedthe sequel, but I can assure I will read it just after I send you this review, and wll also review the sequel.
Congrats for such good story!

ps:I have to confess I thought t woulde just a M rated story with lots of sex scenes, ggladly itt wasnt!

...beautiful. Simply beautiful...

I thought this heroine was actually smart enough to tell the prince, as he can easily provide her fake information. Not only that, she's willing to enjoy happiness at the end of the chapter when her closest friend's life was just put in danger?

I think she's quite selfish and self-absorbed. Especially when she didn't think to worry about Ti when he didn't show up that night, and instead chose to worry about herself. It really didn't occur to her that he could be in danger?

The writing itself is very decent. I do want to point out that "anyways" is not a word, but rather "anyway" is. Thought I'd let you know.

I was disappointed by this story. The plot was enjoyable and kept me reading, but I always expected more from these very two-dimensional characters. Primarily, I was surprised by Cicario's lack of willingness to step it up by the end for Aliana. She has sacrificed so much, and he so very little. I didn't feel like the story was cohesive - perhaps because the plot was changed throughout the course of writing. Overall, kept me reading but wouldn't recommend.

I think this is my favorite chapter. The flirting is adorable, and it helps readers to fall in love with the characters. Great job

Their first kiss wasn't how I imagined it would be. Neither was the death of the assassin. It seemed as if things weren't properly explained.

Hmm... The attempt at sexual tension was mediocre. Not so great nor was it pathetic :)

Eee I really don't like this Ren guy. And Volim? How could he?

Gosh. What will happen now... I never really thought that things would take such a turn. Saddening for Aliana & Ti & Cicario.

Hey! New reader here. I have nothing to say for the first four chapters. I don't know why. They were okay. The story is far from ordinary but still, I didn't feel anything while reading it. About this chapter, I felt like you didn't know what to write about. And your author's note at end just proves my 'instinct'.

Slavery was so much a part of daily life not so many centuries ago. Now it is difficult for most of us to conceive of a reality such as you describe... or to imagine that we, in the same situation, wouldn't constantly be seeking a means of escape. You handle the subject matter well. It should be an interesting story

Haha I couldn't put this story down! Hope you update the sequel soon :)

God fuckin' damn lady. I think Karus is my favorite character. "I dare not, my lord, lest you poison me too." I laughed out loud at that part for five minutes. Best part, I think. Good job!

A nice short story, fun to read. Can't wait to read the sequel.

Intresting...