Reviews for Vampires |
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![]() ![]() ![]() hi |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have good ideas but the way you write them is cliche and kinda boring. You also have a lot of gramatical errors. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked your idea and I think that it would make for an interesting story. You just need some gramatical fixes. |
![]() ![]() ![]() you know this story looks ok, but how can a 1yr old call the cops after her parents got killed by a vampire, a bit far fetched don't you think. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Since this was finished why didn't you put this story to complete? And I don't really get it. Are they kids right now or are they in the afterlife or something? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very weird. Very I am saying isn't really right.I just wanted to say it is very interesting. I like the part at the end. Ya know when he said "why do you intrigue me so" and kissed her. THAT is a rally good cliff hanger. BTW can you r and r my story vampire queen rose celia dracul? Can you also r and r my others but I want you to read that one because I think it has good potential and I want to see if others will like it so...pwease? I did the pwease on purpose by the way. |
![]() ![]() ![]() VERY INTERESTING! I was searching for something to read and the moment I found this one I clicked on it instantly. AWESOME! |
![]() ![]() I really liked where the story was going at the beginning, there were a lot of creative elements (even if some of them didn't make a lot of sense). I feel like as it went on things got a little complicated, like all the new characters really didn't have enough time to develop. The premise was pretty cool, and you're really creative with your ideas. You just need to have more practice and learn about keeping consistent characters. |
![]() ![]() ![]() damn i love this fiction i wish u could write more it was so intresting to read |
![]() ![]() Great story love it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like so far, however it is only one chapter so i cannot say much. Although your discription was very gtood, it really caught my attention! |
![]() ![]() ![]() CHAPTER 8 IS A.W.S.O.M.E! GUD STORY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is a really great story since i first started reading it and it also became interesting when i first started reading it to and i like it and love it a lot your a really great author who wrote this really great and wonderful story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() cool i like it. |
![]() ![]() I LOVE IT PLEASE CONTINUE |