Ah! DON'T STOP THERE!

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Update, please? And do come off hiatus soon 8)

(I absolutely ADORE this story!)

wow, i like it, a lot. lyn's voice is just so perfectly acerbic and bitchy haha. anyways, update soon? and i hope your wisdom teeth thing went all right!

Thank you so much for continuing. I read this last year and I thought you had decided to discontinue it. I'm excited to see how this story goes and I wish you all the best.

your title is from one of the names of the beatles songs, right! I'm a beatles freak! I love your book! ;P

I LOVE THIS STORY! PLEASE UPDATE SON! it's so cute, and grant sounds so hot :(

Okey dokey...I have a couple of things to say. First, please don't stop writing this. It really deserves to be finished, I think. This story has been amazing so far. I really REALLY really like it. So I hope that you decide to continue. After saying that I love this story and that you should never stop writing, this chapter feels a little...off. I don't know if there was time between writing this chapter and the last ones, but it has a different feel to it. It comes off like you lost interest in this story, and are just writing it because you think you should. I hope that you like writing this as much as I like reading it. This chapter feels detached. The story's not really flowing together right now. And, honestly, I have no idea where this is going. At all. Which can be a really good thing, as long as you do know where it's going. That said, I love your writing. This story is amazing, and if you want to take a break from writing it until you're inspired again, I'm all for it. But I do think that you should finish this eventually, and finish it well, for your readers and yourself. This story deserves a good ending. This review feels a little negative right now to me, so I'm just going to add a couple of "I love your story!"s. Here goes: This story is great. It's one of my current favorites on fictionpress. I love the mix of intrigue, action, and romance. Your characters are strong, and, as fictional as they are...suprisingly real. Your action is amazing. I can feel the suspense, and I can't wait for more. I love it. Seriously. In case you haven't gathered it by now, I really really do love Happiness is a Warm Gun. Good luck with it.

-Cari

i realy hope that you do finish your story, but it's totally your choice and all... this just one of the best story lines on fictionpress that I've read (a little flattery never hurt anyone :P)

Wow. Beatiful story. I like that it's packed with more than just a romantic struggle between to close people. I like that there's a plot in there, too. Keep up the incredibly awesome work!

I really admire your story. It's really creative and originally written. Extremely enjoyable as well. )

wooho! update son!

Oh, great chapter. Once again, I think this was made to be onscreen.

I loved how Lyn didn't pay attention in school :)

A little dialogue-heavy, maybe, but other than that...very entertaining and riveting action. I liked the human side to Grant, being frightened of bats...

good chappie!

Good chapter. I can really see this on screen - it's easy to picture and very entertaining.

Maybe you could include a translation of the Japanese? For those of us who are un-educated in that area, lol?

I liked the..relationship between them in this chapter. It's very realistic.

Oh, and mabye you could add a line break between Lyn's perspective and Lee's, just for clarity..

All right. Great chapter. Update SOON.

aw.. he so lieksher its so cute :) i updated so now you have too 8)

hey punch. GREAT chapter. my favorite in a long while!

the relationship btw grant and lyn is progressing amazingly realistically. like, perfect. the dialogue and all. i also like the new idea of tenderness in Grant and how lyn starts recognizing his good looks. haha. have i mentioned how lyn is a very amusing heroine? her little italics are positively YOU. lol.

only a couple things. first, this is kind of a stylistic thing, but there are sometimes fragments that become confusing because they're so abrupt. like, "BUt his. No. His were never second to me." I guess it's the pronouns that make it a little confusing. just - yeah.

and one more. "Moaning, Grant unwrapped his arm from my waist and sat up." I think this is forcing the physical stuff a little too much? i think the mental relationship is perfect atm but physical..i think it's still a little too early for that yet? maybe not. i dunno. anyways..

good chapter! ttyl :)

dude. that was very exciting! i was engrossed. i'm also out of town, lol, in the motherland! yaay.

anyways..great developments. love the direction the story is going!