hey there!

nice first chapter :) I'm intrigued as to what will happen next. Will check back later when I have more time on my hands.

You want to hear something really weird? I first clicked on your story because of your name: "Kalyra Shadowdancer". lol it's just that I have a story (and a character) that uses the word "Shadowdancer". And then you want to hear something even MORE weird? The character in the story is actually named Kia! Weird huh? Do you go on fanfiction at all?

Anyway, cool beginning (and an odd little coincidence :P) and I'll check back soon! Promise!

Lv, Nadia

I look forward to finding out more about your villain. Aaron as well. ) Good story concept. Always be vigilant in spell checking. ) Will read the next chapters. [P.S. If you can spare the time, please read and review my story Unmarked Boundaries. Thanks. ) ]

This just keeps getting better. Keep it up. ) -Leila

Interesting chapter.

I wonder who those 'friends' are...

Hey-first off, YAY A NEW CHAPTER and a good one, too. I liked how you ended it and it was funny near the end. The blonde boy hadn't counted on Aaron reading his thoughts, no :P? Ok, one thing I did notice was that I thought Kia took the "being a Talent" thing too easily... i would think something like that would be a little harder to swallow. Anyways, you're the writer, not me, and keep writing! Loving this story :D

*Bella*

~Kia Kha~

P.S. Hey, you actually SWORE numerous times! this is good... i feel better... i have been sidestepping swearing in my stories cuz i wasn't sure how you n jynx would take it... lol so yay for you :)

K, I read over every chapter and made a list of 'good and bad' things. (this is gonna be a LONG review. be happy)

'bad' things first, cuz its always good to get this stuff outta the way:

1. In the prologue, i got a bit confused, but that soon passed as I read more of the story. It seemed that characters jumped back and forth a little, but no biggie.2. It felt like the story progressed too fast. Like, one minute we knew nothing about Kia(luv the name btw), and then BOOM, we knew AlOT about her. U kno wat i'm talking about, cuz i seem to do it with my stories as well. Again, no biggie.3. Just as other ppls mentioned, a few grammatical errors, but i kno u. I kno wen u get to bed and wen u wake up, and i kno how u feel in the morning. Just proofread and run ure stuff through a spellcheck before posting it.

yay! now we get to the good stuff:

1. Ure characters are well balanced and have a distinct personality. I hate wen characters all seem to have the same issues and idea's. Drives me insane. 2. A great description of area's surrounding the characters. I like how the barn and corral sound and ure description of a cell was interesting.3. Good dialogue. The characters were in constant communication with each other, and i felt like i was reading wat intelligent people say(and wat would i kno about smart people :P).4. Top notch on the suspence and mystery part. Keep me there for much longer tho and i'll be hunting down ure swimming JI's and tell them to be EXTRA annoying.

Anyway, is that review long enuf? *whew* I better see the next chapter soon or it's gonna be a hockey stick jabbing ya(i STILL got that bruise on my chin *grumble* stupid ryan)u kno i luv ya!~Aurora~

I love the new chapter. I can't wait for Aaron's explanation. Update this as soon as you can.

Hey,

another good chapter. Wonder how Aaron can always find Kia...? Hmm. I guess I'll still wonder till you reveal your secret. Keep it up!

*Bella*~Kia Kha~P.s. I'm glad you liked Window to my Soul :P I actually have read both the books you suggested, they were good I wasn't even planning on posting it but it turned into a reader friendly diary hehe! I'll try n update soon- you too!

Uh oh, more fire... I loved the chapter and hopefully more will be uncovered now Aaron has turned up. Update ASAP.

I'm impressed that you've managed to stick with this story as much as you have. It just shows that you CAN finish of your other 'works' if you put your mind to it.

I'm really impressed.

Hope the next chapter is as good as this last one.

Another great chapter. Very descriptive, too! Just one thing I noticed- in this chapter, a lot of your words (this may just be how it uploaded) are "scrunched up." E.g. "she dropped the knife andthrew her hands up " - the andthrew should be and threw with a space. You made a couple other mistakes like that. Just a trivial, easy to fix mistake. Otherwise, keep it up!

*Bella*

~Kia Kha~

I don't know if you'd like praise or suggestions or both, so I'll give you both and you can disregard whatever you don't like. First off, great job. It's a great idea, and really has me wanting to read on. Your descriptions of the fire are awesome. )

A couple of things you may want to consider...one, you have a lot of dialogue. It's well-written, but keep in mind that too much uninterrupted dialogue can be overwhelming. Also, Kia calls Amelia "Mrs. Lastname" to her face, but refers to her as "Amelia" when she's speaking to Jeremy. Nothing necessarily wrong with it, but I don't know a lot of teens/young adults who do that.

Last thing (and this is not a problem either, I have no idea what your intentions are), this is pretty fast-paced. My guess is that you're writing things as they come to you and you'll put in things that aren't so directly related to the plot once you're done writing the plot. You're so focused on the plot, you haven't really developed Kia's character yet. But you seem to know what you're doing, so just keep doing it.

Those are just some things to think about. Your storyline is engrossing. I love it! Keep up the good work! -Leila

A speedy update from when I reviewed. Yay! lol. Anyway, I enjoyed the chapter and I can't wait to find out more: about her dreams, the police station, the burns, e.t.c. Basically everything! Update as soon as you can.

Hey!

Thanks for updating soon! This story just gets more and more interesting. Now, the only thing I noticed mistake wise was that in your story you put commas beside your ands and buts. E.G. "seeking for her, but she had no way to call it" I believe that when a character is speaking, some times there are natural pauses in which you put a comma. But when you're narrorating,(sp?) you are not supposed to put commas beside and or but or because. Or so I believe. Anyways keep it up. This is going on my favourites!

*Bella*

~Kia Kha~

P.S. Thanks for the "reference" :P

Ah, so the secret of my anonymous ID is out... ;)

This chapter is very interesting. I'm very interested in seeing how Kia copes with this ability. Perhaps she eventually learns how to control it?