Reviews for Quid Pro Quo
Carbon Slash chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
Lol I think it's quite good. Maybe this will pull Nora closer to Gideon... I don't know, but keep it up~
jennycraig10 chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
Good chapter, despite what you say... although i do understand the feeling of hating how your chapter turns out... does it feel like u just can't seem to get ur idea across? or is it that you're stuck on an idea?
bitchy hiphopchick chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
Wel! Its obvious that she is completly utterly head over heels for him. Also I hope that your mother gets well soon. My dad's having surgery too
twistedICYjunk chapter 8 . 5/18/2005
ok so this is kinda late i know but I just started reading your story, so please please please forgive me.

2. no, not really, maybe she could explain what happened to gideon later, but its not really a necessity.

3. don't change it...I like him four

4. Gideon...hes so sweet!

5. I like the characters you have

6. DAILY DAILY DAILY!

7. definitely

8. nope, not that I saw.
FamousOneLiners chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
I LIKE IT!
pneumothorax chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
A/N: The kids are probably just learning the names.

Review:

Nice analergy (I know.. that's spelt wrong): "clinging to me for dear life as if I’m a buoy, awash in the sea of adulthood." Interesting image. Poor Lucian - never saw him as fearing adults.

Gideon says: "“Lucian, stop.”" (stop in italics. very important) he comes across quite strongly. Good line.

He does however, as Nora points out show very little .. remorse? (maybe the wrong word.) emotion in the hospital:

"“I don’t know, to be honest,” He says, sticking his finger under my father’s nose and waiting..." sticking his finger was an illustration of this. Not because it invaded space of ill person or whatever, but maybe because it seemed too clinical.

One point: "I don’t fight him as he grabs my head and pulls it so it’s resting on his shoulder." He stands to put his finger under the nose, so how can Nora put her head on his shoulder? However, the 'look I'm sorry line' was a bit more normal-ish, nice ending section.
PhoenixFire415 chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
This is the bomb! I hope you allow suggestions... if you don't...well then just forget this. I like this chapter and it is cool, but I don't really get the point...I admit I'm dense. I think...thats it...otherwise, this chapter is perfect, or, nearly perfect. I like the interaction between Nora and Gideon, so far, I guess. Keep up the good work!
XXX chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
Hmm... why don't you like the chapter? I agree it seems to be a little angsty but some conflict IS needed in the story. This works but seems a little extreme still. However if you play your cards right you could probably get it to work really well.
spikedmango chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
DEAR LORD! (sorry) She gives in waay too easy! That's all that's wrong. Gideon's reminding me of some kind of freaky rapist. He has too much power over Nora, it's kinda scary. It'll be interesting to see how he'll react when Nora starts to fight back - she had better start to fight back, anyway.

You never said... should I draw up the adoption papers for Harely? Whose character heaven would he end up in? I made him but you used him first. Hmm.

Nice chapter _
AngelaSolis chapter 13 . 5/18/2005
Well, I like it. Kids always say 'Why' like that and it's exasperating and cute at the same time. And, Nora shouldn't say she 'hates' people unless she really does ... but she's angsty so it's allowed. More please. *hugs*
pneumothorax chapter 12 . 5/18/2005
I've been getting round to buying catcher in the rye. Some reviews said it wasn't that good onwards. But am glad you said it's good :)

Interesting chapter. I swear I author alert-ed this but apparently not because by the time (today) I realised it'd been updated, I've forgotten huge parts of it. Has this chapter changed? because I remembered her coming home, ringing Meredith and then Meredith ringing 911. Was that just me..?
W3DNESDAY chapter 2 . 5/17/2005
woot! latin!congrats on writing 10 whole chapters! it's a feat that i myself have never achieved..the story looks good.. mrs. prescott seems like she's gonna be quite a characterHOLLABACK GIRL!
Denali chapter 12 . 5/17/2005
OOh, funfun. Now what's going to happen? Hope you mom gets through surgery okay! Write more soon.
Denali chapter 8 . 5/17/2005
Well, I don't know if it's too late now, But, I think you should put Nora's mother's death in a conversation, or a flashback. Lucian's age is fine how it is. It makes things interesting. Lucian also happens to be my favorite charecter. He so funny! Pleanty of charecters right now. Don't really care how you update, as long as you do update. If you bring her mom back into the story or come up with a twist, it definately has the poential for your twenty page story you want. No gaping holes that I can think of. If you want to put me into the story, if its not too late (if so, oh well) Can I be Lucian's friend or Randy's girlfriend? Thanx, and keep it up! This is a great story, you've done really well with it!
Bellissimo Addio chapter 12 . 5/17/2005
Aw... Poor Nora.
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