I love it when I stumble across little treasures ( so to speak/write whatever) that aren't revolved around mr arrogant and ms sarcastic with 793 reviews! I Liked this it was fluid and descriptive which is a style I think works well, it was light yet with something substantial about it. And thank you for not writing reams and reams for a first chapter. I hate that!

I also found it a bit humerous " Randy is not dramatic; his body is", quirky nice line!

Anyway I like the tense you write in, its not easy but you make it easy. No (contrusctive) critismn to write as yet, but I like so keep writing!

Love Maroon

Oh yeh I know what you mean bout finishing a fiction...im hopeless as every scrap of my inspiration seems to fizzle away.

it's good so far. it's got great potential, that much is for certain. update soon, ok? :)

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hah i love it! i found another gem at 10:30 PM on a monday night! some of the other stories i've browsed are incredibly dull or plotless, or just not good...but this one holds promise. i hope you continue and soon! (you must know i'm a sucker for anything to do with literary pursuits or just even working in a bookstore. yeah. i'm a cool person like that. :-P i

Excellent job~I think this story has a lot of potential and you should definitely keep it up! :)-SciFiGeek

sticking with a story past 10 chapters is always a good idea, lol. i really enjoyed reading this first chapter. great flow and descriptive voice, and there was a nice blend of personalities introduced already. love the touch of humour you've added. ) don't know why this has hit me, but it really has, in some strange way. i can't think of why. but yes. continue, and i'll keep up. nice going.

~k8

I'm not really into romance but you got a good start here. You really dont stay to long with one story and really like some of the ones that ive read(yeah no reviews sorry). Hopefully youll find that one tha you can stick with though. best of luck to ya.

Sounds promising, not sure where it's gonna go ... or if it's gonna go ... and ... you can't have straight tendrils hon ;)

You're going to continue? And actually finish? There's actually a plot? *raises eyebrow* Forgive me if I seem suspicious. Also: "He can be walking in a totally vacant area with a completely flat floor, and trip in the middle" seemed too familiar for my tastes (hehe) Nice work. Hey make this a paid AGH THERE'S AN ANT ON MY LAPTOP account and you get an email here! Aww I wanna work in a bookstore... employee discounts... hm...