Reviews for Out of the Rain |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, I'm so very surprised. I was very confused at first about Ranier's job. But wow! ha. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm only at the first chapter but I'm enjoying it so far. I can't wait to read more! Keep it up! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Hey ari!sorry for taking so longto makea review. This is really good. I mean it. Well, I guess I'll see you later! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter. I really can't wait to see what happens next, and every author wants that sort of reaction. My only critique would be not to go over too much that we already have seen in the previous chapter. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() omg! It's so good and yet so sad...please continue... |
![]() ![]() Such a wonderful story, it gives tears to my eyes. I can actually feel Rainer's pain as he was given assignment to kill Aerin. I hope she will survive and in later chapters they would be together in peace. And she would recieve the throne to bring peace back to the central Continent. This story is very nice, keep up the good work ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey there~ I like the story you have up ) It's pretty well-written and it was a great read. I definitely liked the twist and turns you had in the begining. The last few chappies however it seemed like there was just too much coincidences and all lose ends were being tied up. Let it be messy, let the readers be anxious. You don't quite have to always make sure every surprise/twist is explained out this early on. Hope that made some sense P I really liked the style and just how there seemed to be a beauty in your words. Anyways, great last sentence. I thought that was definitely a good way to end the chapter. Incredible read D Good luck with your next update! Happy writings |
![]() ![]() ![]() good stuff...sweet chappie...i'm in a bit of a rush so i'll just stop here for now. ciao! |
![]() ![]() ![]() omg! I'm almost in tears...this is really good and I want to read more! I love this story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, the story has gone somewhere I didn't quite expect. It feels like Aerin learned everything way too quickly, but the quick pace does add a sense of suspense I suppose. I also think there wasn't enough power between Ranier and Aerin during their first meeting. Other than that, however, this was a wonderful chapter. I love the Skylar character and look forward to seeing more of her. Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is great stuff. keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() Nice set up but some little style points I thought I might mention. The "train men" likely are not going to have the same cadence, energy, vocabulary or length the priest or aerin may have in their dialogue, try to write for the characters instead of the pretty story, I don't mean to throw in trash or slang, just use normal speaking for normal working joes %)Before I forget 'I tried to arouse her' it's just rouse. At one point it may have been a-rouse like a-wake but now, that word has a vastly different connotation and rouse is and ROLL,Malaine |
![]() ![]() ![]() XD haha, great chapter, I'm updating right now, but I might not finish the chapter til tomoro. ] |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw, cliffhanger... . lol...glad it's really picking up now..now update! |