|Reviews for Auction|
| Nebulae chapter 2 . 8/23/2005
An interesting premise. Pray tell, what time period exactly are you telling your story in? I'd assume an ancient time, although I could see this as modern day in a weird, underworld sort of way. My comments would be that your setting could use a bit more description. Other things: explanations, a problem to get the plot moving, characterization, would be nice but in the first two chapters there's only so much that can be done, so I can wait on those. I like that your character doesn't speak the language (points given for logic), although if this is set in an ancient time (my guess so far is the Roman period), why should some Scottish girl know the geography of Europe? If she did, that would imply that she's well educated and, perhaps, speaks another language in addition to Gaelic. Then again, perhaps not.
All in all, you have a good start but a lot more could be made of what you have.