Simply Amazing. This story was just fantastic. You have great Potential!

I really loved this story. I am completely hooked on Titanic stories so I was happy to find this one. I though your imagry was excellent, and your characters were very real. I also liked the way you did the Epilogue. All and all very nice, I'll have to move on to Part II.

I really liked how you wrote this chapter...you described what happened to them in an interesting way, through newspaper artciles...very original...it seems like everyone lived happily ever in all, the story was very good...realistic dialogue and strong characters. Excellent job...keep writing!~Sahara~

It seems like everybody's going to be happy now...too bad about Veronica's parents. Why is John suddenly so nice and open? But that's good for Emily because she'll need someone to be her friend...nice job!~Sahara~

It's very nice of Dicky to take the child into his own hands...I really hope that the Briggs made it...but I don't think they did. "Dicky nodded. Hard—no, impossible to believe, to realize that was all at the bottom of the ocean." I really like this sentence...shows how unbelievable it was that the Titanic actually sank. Nice job!~Sahara~

This chapter was very sad...all those people screaming and drowning in the icy cold water...I feel very sorry for Emily and her mother. I can't wait to find out if anyone survived.~Sahara~

This chapter was sad...all of the men saying good bye to their wives and children, and they don't know what will happen to them. It was nice of Beactrice to stay behind with her husband, but I'm surprised she decided to do that. Nice job!~Sahara~

Very nice chapter...I liked how you described that a lot of the passengers weren't worried at all and didn't understand what was happening...but then as the chapter progressed, they got more and more nervous. Nice job!~Sahara~

Excellent cliffhanger...perhaps you could help break the paragraphs where it goes back to other people's perspectives...it got kind of confusing. Anyways, excellent chapter...great dialogue and I liked the way you described the iceberg...nice job!~Sahara~

This is very interesting...is Arthur having money problems so that he needs Mr. Stuart's help? It seems like he and Beatrice don't have a good relationship at all...I'd like to find out more about Mr. Thomas...excellent job.~Sahara~

Why Emily's sudden change in attitude torwards other people on the ship? Mrs. Stuart is very obsessed with her who daughter knows and how she acts in public...very nice dialogue, as always.~Sahara~

Very nice chapter...you really are a very good writer...you describe things well and keep the suspense going...which I love...why does Beatrice find writing a book to be so shameful? It doesn't seem like Emily is to eager to marry John...nice job.~Sahara~

Very nice chapter...I really love all the dialogue...it's not boring at all...the characters all seem to have their own faults which really come into play...it seems like Beatrice intends to ditch Arthur and go after Dicky...very intriguing. Excellent job!~Sahara~

I really liked this first chapter...I love stories about the Titanic so that's why I decided to read it. This chapter really got me hooked...I loved the way you "showed" and not "told" how the characters were feeling and the dialogue was very realistic...nice job..I'm going to keep reading.~Sahara~

Oh I really liked the ending to this. It's sad that the Briggs both died, but if the story was to be realistic someone had to. I am a little disappointed that Dicky ended up with Caroline though- for some reason I never liked them together. But I liked your way of presenting the ending. Instead of just telling us what happened to the characters, you gave it in a unique way so it felt more as if we were looking at them from an outsider's point of view rather than a narrator's. All in all, great story. I love reading about the Titanic!