Perfect.

Oh my god... That was ... brilliant, wonderful, awe-inspiring... I'm speechless. That was lovely. Please keep on writing things like this or something. Love it, adore it. Keep it up! _

OMG, that was amazing, I am totally blown away by this piece. It's wonderful, and I was so into it, and then it left us all hanging. Argh. LOL. Is this supposed to be a one-shot? Because it certainly sounds like a very good one! I absolutely love this plotline!

That was so wonderfully and insanely intense. I loved it. Loved it! The style was perfect to the story you were telling. It was fast paced and smooth and totally kept me on the edge of my seat. Very nicely done. My only complaint is that there isn't more of it! It's a great beginning to a wild action-packed, mystery-thriller that promises romance and intrigue. Admittedly, though, that would be difficult to carry-off in a longer story, so I'm happy with what you have here; but if you ever feel like challenging yourself to develop this into something longer, I would eagerly read it.

That didn't make a whole lot of sense.

But you've got this fantastic ability to make the reader trust you the plot, and the characters, and the flashbacks and everything, so even if we have no idea where this is going right now we can have it in good faith that it's going to be amazing.

Oh, wait, it already is. -grin-

Goodness, I want your style. My breath caught in my chest after the first sentence and it's scarcely moved since. -thumps chest-

I'm watching you!

I don't know why, but this kinda reminds me of "Loves Music, Loves to Dance" during the waltzing sequences.

I liked it though, it was a nice change to other fiction and well-paced.

OMG! Don't stop! You need to update soon! It's been like a year! Please! I love it!

Oh my, that was lovely.I'm still a bit confused about the bits printed in italics but I'm sure that'll become clear as the story work so far, I really enjoyed this first chapter.

Wow. That's all i can say. Wow. That was so effective, i love where this story is going. Best first chappy i've read in a long time. hope you intend to continue this story!

I truely loved this story. Incredibly well-done. The transitions between flashbacks were great-i loved how the whole story was a secret-you had to think...the way the flashbacks created the story was wonderful. Keep up the amazing work.

It was so suspenseful and thrilling to read. It gave me a chilling gut feeling that made me imaptient and uncomfortable because I really wanted to know what was going on and why. The only thing that kind of bothered me (or maybe I'm just delusional) was that some of the characters reminded me of characters from Gundam Wing. No offense though! Update soon!

Excellent story! Are you going to continue writing it? I really hope you do!

Hey! I really enjoyed really your story. The suspense was awesome and it seems to have a great plot. But I'm quite confused. Are the words in italics events that have happened before? And is Marcus supposed to be a killer that's turned good? The story sounds very interesting... I just... don't quite get how the bits connect. But keep up the great work anyhow!

OMFG. This story is awesome. Great descriptions, although the single quotation marks are annoying, it's really ... no word to describe it.

Wow.

Full stop.

UPDATE SOON!

This is a great story! Keep at it.