Reviews for Going Native
Guest chapter 12 . 7/12/2016
'no such thing as bi?'
fuck you, I'm done. this shit just got personal.

- anon who has been, is and always will be bisexual
ps you can't call me a whore because people who watch Star Trek with their mothers have no hope at whoring
Encore19 chapter 13 . 9/26/2015
I liked this story! It was entertaining, even though no sex or blowjob was explored in detail. I don't really mind though. Good work. Wondering if Lauren's gonna keep the baby. Hmmm.
Encore19 chapter 12 . 9/26/2015
Why is John eliminating the possibility that he's bisexual? Hmmm, oh well. This was interesting. Although dark. Can't believe Lauren's pregnant.
Encore19 chapter 11 . 9/26/2015
Hoohoohoo, Aiden's Mum is very open. Disturbingly so. I really thought you were a girl but some things you've said about how Aiden relates to being gay, and the frustrations of straight guys, makes me think you might be a boy.
Encore19 chapter 10 . 9/18/2015
Oh those Laycocks and their pent-up bi-curiosity... I hope we don't get too into a predictable plot and instead just get more fanservice /
Encore19 chapter 9 . 9/18/2015
Aiden finally got the hair compliment he was looking for. And that scene was super hot yay! I don't even feel like critiquing we got M content yay!
Encore19 chapter 8 . 9/18/2015
John wanted to be LIKE Jessie? He already said he masturbated to her every day. And what about Aiden? He's a gay guy who obviously doesn't care what people think. I'm still weirded out by you just referring to him as a 'faggot' all the time. That new habit is strange.

But let them get it on next chapter! Pulease~~~!
Encore19 chapter 7 . 9/18/2015
Well that little AN is cool.

Linda experimenting with a girl? Hmmmm yeah okay maybe.

Lauren having a threesome with a guy? No way. She's a lesbian right? And boys are gross. They have hair and sweat and testicles are ugly.

Yeah rolling your eyes does seem girly, but a few things John does makes him seem girly to me.
Encore19 chapter 6 . 9/18/2015
I guess it's not that surprising Linda would want to try stuff with a girl. Girls are just better looking than guys in so many ways. I prefer men to women and I can say that. Aiden could've probably convinced John to kiss him in exchange for his help. Teeheehee. Good chapter!
Encore19 chapter 5 . 9/18/2015
I find it weird that you - the narrator - have referred to Aiden as a faggot in the chapter title and in a part of the story. I think it's very weird that Aiden would suddenly flip from a friend that knew Jessie so well to a sudden blackmailer. I know Jessie spread rumors about Aiden and John dating but I'm sure she expect that to set Aiden off as much as it did - I didn't expect it.

Aiden surprised me with his trespass sneaking, it seemed quite badass. I was enjoying his gay image cause that was original in slash stories. But now according to John Aiden's significantly less gay just because his hair is now black? I'm sort of into sexy jock girly gay at the moment now xD

This is good though! I really hope I get to see Aiden and John M content. Still wondering how you're going to get them together though.
Encore19 chapter 4 . 9/17/2015
Hrrrmmm nope not really a fan of this one. Why is John so nitt-picky? Noticing Aiden use his first name. I mean I guess maybe it was unusual, but John himself said he wanted to be civil first. It sure is a shame Aiden's now developed a really big crush on the most homophobic guy in the school.

I think Jessie's grudge on John is bizarre, even weirder how Aiden called it. But how could Jessie be the dykiest dyke Aiden knows if she's also described as a gorgeous goddess? I mean we don't know what she looks like but that gives me the idea of a feminine refined beauty.

I'm still really interested to see how Aiden and John get together but I hope how it happens doesn't bug me.
Encore19 chapter 3 . 9/17/2015
Straightest thing to walk the Earth? No, I don't believe that haha. Then again Aiden isn't privy to John's inner thoughts.

So John's a looker then? We didn't receive any information on his looks until now. And Aiden is so into him. That's hot. I hope John gives it to him hard and fulfills his straight boy fantasies. Teehee.
Encore19 chapter 2 . 9/17/2015
Well hmmm. Jack's a dick and all but that doesn't give Aiden the right to sexually assault him either. Erotically touching a guy he knows to be not interested in him won't help convince Jack that homosexuals shouldn't tolerate discrimination.

Jack was full on mentally critiquing Aiden's lipstick colour choice. I think you might need to work on your 'straight' characters xD
Encore19 chapter 1 . 9/17/2015
I want Aiden to devour John's snake hehehe

I had a hard time believing John was straight. Describing Jessie as gorgeous and a goddess. He said he whacked off thinking about her every night but I think he would've made a more convincing straight guy if he described her bust or butt or actual physical components. And describing some of his movements as graceful didn't make me think he was straight.

I'm glad Aiden's a cute more-so stereotypical gay boy.
Cranberry chapter 8 . 8/19/2015
I like this story but when you refer to Aiden as the f*ggot in the narration, it pulls me right out of the story. I can understand it being used when someone is talking but when it's used elsewhere it feels like you are being incredibly disrespectful to your own character as you could just have easily used his name.
Sorry for being so negative; but f*ggot is a slur and I don't think it should be used by the third person in a story. Otherwise I am very much enjoying the plot.
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