Hey, excellent clarity in this branch of depression...something I can easily relate to. It doesn't have much imagery, but when it does it immediately has a huge impact on the image portrayed to the reader, emphasizing the hurt and this mad darkness. Very good work.

*stands there stunned* This is amazing...I love the imagery...and I reaaly relate...tis awsome, keep it up _-pammy-

YES! i can finally review! oh man.. i love this poem. jon u can realli write.. its so nice.. you noe i study in literature.. this thing called poems that actually take shape after a certain emotion or happening.. like this..

this is a poem about a spaghetti thats was slurped up by some greedy person and one single strand came out from his noseindeed it was gross and he had spaghetti sauce all over his face

just a crappy example. anyway.. i tink u acheived it without even know such a technique existed. wow. haha its really good. and the way it ends of is really good. emphasis on the last word. the shorter the sentences get, the impact is greater, the meaning is deeper and the depressed feeling of slowly diminishing is well executed. ((:

Intense and powerful.