|Reviews for kingdom of Clouds|
| Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 5/17/2005
| sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 5/16/2005
Well, haikus are supposed to be made up of seventeen syllables. Most people write them in the traditional 5-7-5 format, but there are also tankas (5-7-7). This is in 6-10-8 format. I don’t know if you intended this or if it was a mistake, so I thought I’d point it out to you. Also, “infidels grows” is improper English. A plural noun takes a plural verb, and “grows” is singular. Just a few suggestions for improvement!
| Broken Telephone chapter 1 . 5/15/2005
Nice poem! Good job!