I have enjoyed this story so far and I have come to this conclusion. This is actually an anime. It's just something about this story, It MUST become an anime someday! I really like your writing *thumbs up* Here's to gabby ending up with who I like most *raises goblet filled with strawberry fanta*

no, not clayton...paul!

EP! That was an excellent story! I loved the little plot twist at the end! I totally wasn't expecting her to choose Clay because Jordan liked Paul. I thought that she would choose Clay anyway, so when she said "I want to be with you," I was like, "Aha! I knew it!" But then! There was the plot twist! And I was like, "Oh my gosh! I totally didn't expect that!"

I like how Jordan finally tells him, but he doesn't end up getting the message. I like it because Jordan still gets her answer and a chance to say it, but it doesn't make things awkward between the two in the future. I also like how she and Clay weren't bitter about Paul and Gabby at the end of the story. ending with those two was great. :D

Overall, I loved this romantic story! In fact, I think it's the first novel that I've actually finished reading here on Fictionpress. . . Anywho, yes! I loved it! :D

Great Story,

My Parakeet Has Issues

Ps.

I was reading the last bit of this, I was thinking about Paramore's newest song called "The Only Exception".

Here's a big typo that I thought I should point out:

"Clayton," Jordan continued, "you, too."

Both Gabby and Jordan looked at one another. Shock apparent in their eyes

I'm loving this story! I wish I had it on paper so I could read it without the internet. :P

Listening to your mom have sex with someone is creepy. *pats Gabby sympathetically* I've been there too, tho I did not end up wit a step brother.

Little inconsiderate of her mother to bring someone (and his son!) home without mentioning it to her.

~NKB

Haha. Kinda reminds me of the love triangle in twilight. . .

Hi!

I really like the little blurb about teachers outside of school. I also really like how subplots are slowly being introduced throughout the story. Very nice job. :)

nice chapter. But this part seemed very repetitive to me. . .

"Thank you, Mr. Tem," Neil said. He let go of his wife and held out an arm which she took. They had the Weisman couple proceed and Neil held out an arm for Betty to take. Dutifully, she grabbed it and let him lead her to the dining room.

Doesn't it say twice that he holds out an arm and she takes it?

Just thought that I would point that out to you.

Oh very nice first chapter. Short and sweet! Kinda odd that she just wakes up and there's a boy in her house saying that he is her new brother. . . But a nice way to end the chapter. Now, since I am curious, I will keep reading. :)

well that last line is certainly an attention grabber!

OMG. i so effing love this fic!

HAHAH.

when Jordan shouted "I love yiu." then Paul said the same thing I was like, "WTFH?"

and then i felt both relieved and annoyed when Paul had mistook it as a friendly kind of way. LOL.

aw. I hope Clay and Jo get together... I think they make an adorable couple. ,

great fic once again and now I'm off to read the sequel!

~MysticBlood

I have a few things to say: one, I liked it. Two, you should say that it's complete. Three, I really didn't want them to get together.

Ok.. you did leave me in a lot of suspense with the final chapter. I just feel bad for Clay and Jo :( It's not a very happy ending for them and in a way the story became about them instead of Gabby and Paul. *sigh* Although it seems to reflect real life a little more... Onto part II!

It really adds a whole new type of story when you play the song that goes with the chapter before reading it. :) Its like a movie that way.

Aw, poor Paul - what a horrible thing his father said.

On a happier note I thought that was an awesome moment when Gabby is trying to tell Clayton she wants to go out with him again and he comes to the conclusion that Paul does. Hahahaha - I couldn't stop laughing.