|Reviews for The Ion, the Witch and the Murderer|
| Ping Teo chapter 2 . 5/25/2005
An interesting start, and your writing style is fairly smooth, but there are some tense errors (shined?).
Oh, and what the heck is "anime-esque" hair?
Hair can be curly, wavy, spiky, short or long, but if I'm not mistaken, the word "anime" stands for "Japanese animated manga"... hardly a suitable adjective for "hair". (Unless there are a bunch of Japanese-style comics printed on the character's hair, then disregard what I said.)
Also, in anime, hair can be curly, spikey, wavy... you get the point. You'd be better off sticking to "spiky" if that's what your intention was.
But keep writing. You've got promise as long as you don't try too hard to make your work "anime-ish" without proper understanding of what it is.
Don't confuse visual style and substance. They are two entirely different things.
| The Fourth Fate chapter 1 . 5/21/2005
i luv the name!
| SheepiChan chapter 1 . 5/21/2005
Phwee~! Great start! X3 I can't wait to see what you have ready!