Reviews for Salvation from a Pill
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 9/28/2007
Awesome poem.

Good luck with poetry and life.

I like your penname.

Have a wonderful day. :)

~Twilight Starr~
Elizabeth Ebony chapter 1 . 8/3/2005
wow,pretty last powerful and deep,good job.

E~Ebony.
Moonbeam Elegance chapter 1 . 5/28/2005
deep and very sad

Moonbeam E
Kiyoe chapter 1 . 5/26/2005
wow. that was really in depth. i like the part "And you’re so beautiful

With mascara streaking down

And your hair in tangled vines". it's like a beautiful song
deathbysilvya chapter 1 . 5/26/2005
Hello-I'm not sure if you used my advice or not, but this piece seems a lot more concise than the previous. The rhythm and word choice work well together. I'm not sure about the use of so many "and"'s, I would probably cut some... There are some great lines here: 4, 7, 10.. Is sweetheart supposed to be capitalized in the 2nd to last line? Typo in the last line: you your. I really think this is the tightest piece I've read of yours.
account not in use chapter 1 . 5/25/2005
Wow. Deep, intense...very well writeen and worded. 'And swallow your life away'...very stunning end.
The Fourth Fate chapter 1 . 5/25/2005
Aw. Very sad, but very true to today's world. The descriptions are amazing. I love the lines "With mascara streaking down/ and your hair in tangled vines" and "Take off the lid, Sweetheart/ and swallow your life away" Wow. SUCH a good poem.
Eye of the Needle chapter 1 . 5/25/2005
that was very good! I love the comparison between the person and a pill, very well written and tactful as well, good job!