|Reviews for Mists and Magic|
| edensrose chapter 1 . 5/29/2005
I really like this so far. I hope you continue it!
| VampireLady2006 chapter 1 . 5/28/2005
HA! I found it! I love it and I love your writing style it's so beautiful and expressive. Can't wait for the 2nd chapter!
| symphonynumbernine chapter 1 . 5/27/2005
hey, excellent beginning. i'm enthralled by the character. please keep itup, i want to know what type of story this develops into. i really like ur writing skills, its very artistic. great job, and do keep it up!
| Passing chapter 1 . 5/26/2005
A really interesting start so far. There was one or two typos, but those can be quickly fixed with a bit of revising. Your paragraph structure is interesting, but could use some tuning up. They're really drawn out and sometimes reading commas over and over again gets a little old. Try and keep the sentences a little more narrower, though it's not necessary to make the story grand. Really nice description-though, I would try use another word besides "mist" every time. Try "haze", "fog", etc. words like that can be used to describe "mist" Great job! :P Hope to see more!