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I really like this, but in some places I hate how you use the same words tO describe different scenes annoys me a lot!

But still. I keep thinking is this actually real? But even if it is, I still like it.

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I like how you started off. It was simple and right frOm the start you had me interested and wanting more.

Although it was only a small chapter, it was good enough to start and introduce the plot.

Nic work

I just reread this while thing...i still love it :)

I just came across this story today and read it all the way through. Keeping track of the boatloads of brothers was kind of difficult at first, but I kinda fell in love with all of them at the end. The whole thing was very male-centric, but fair enough. Well written. I wish Mitch and Sarah had been fleshed out a bit more. It was kind of uncanny reading about the Baker's Square on Ogden avenue. Too bad that place closed down, huh? (Yeah, I live near Chicago and went to high school in the rich suburbs where "everyone goes to country clubs and the kids shoot up heroin", to paraphrase :p). And I'm familiar with the best community college in the country, too; most kids from my high school ended up there. Brought back some memories; never thought I'd enjoy a work even more because it's set in a familiar setting.

Well, it's been four years or so since you finished this, but you should totally consider writing on this site again. :)

Wonderful story. Good job on it. I just think that in the beginning, before we read about the past in her nightmares, that the story just kept dragging on. I was about to not finish it because all it was talking about was I hate Mitch, no you can't date my best. friend, and the term paper. Anyways, congrats on completing it, I'm really glad I stuck to reading it, and yup...

Oh, this chapter was so sad; it made me cry. I feel so bad for them, and Chris just had to add to it by saying that crap about her...

I really enjoyed this, it's a great story itself, and all thr chracters were strong. I loved the their family and how it was about that as well as the were quite a few typos and grammatical errors that i came across but thats only technicalities. :D Looking forward to reading the rest of the stories!

Okay let me digest this- Chris values his friends more than his younger sister? No, 'If he touches you I'll have to break his neck'? Instead, she shouldn't be going near him? Wow. He's a downright asshole. He really needs a good slap and just for that I hope Jason is the secret admirer and that Melissa gets with him. That bastard. What kind of a brother is he?

It was such a coincidence that I just had to comment that ruby soho came on my iPod while I was reading this chapter (seeing as the chapter is named for the song, in case you forgot [It's been a few years since this was finished])

Wonderful story! It seemed pretty realistic overall, not just another one of those cliched stories that even Disney wouldn't write :D Definitely one of my favorites, really hope you decide to do a sequel sometime, I'd love to see what happens with Melissa and Jason in their future.

I LOVED IT

I really like this story, it's great.

a decade under the infuence-TAKING BACK SUNDAY XD

Wow nice story its amazing